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Book is ok feels more needs to be done on Character development. Feels rushed need to slow down and develop interactions otherwise I'm enjoying this novel.
At the start it was quite interesting but as the novel progressed the MC became racist,stupid, illogical and perverted.I have totally stopped reading it.If it gets better I'll try again.
So gaming stories aren't really my thing but I will say this story was quite enjoyable. Really liked the plot (although I wish the blurb had been written better - it really undermines the story) and characters were amazing. I'm really curious about how the two characters are going to get on.Grammar was okay but there were times it was a little messy with missing punctuation and capital letters. Otherwise, I'm excited to see where this author takes this story.
the translation, or english of the author( idk which it is but the way them words is written) is a bit broken and disjointed. otherwise a very good novel, the world is slowly getting fleshed out and I like that we only know as much as the MC there is no omnipotence or system so far and things are taking their time. also we start with a natural birth instead of a death or any other trope, so there are some light time skips early on, but they're sparse considering they could be done repeatedly. so over all good, just needs an editor!
for the sake of God can you please upgrade to 4th grade or higher after every fight he is injured heavily and 5th orders always got killed by his using tricks his adopted brother Leo is 4th grade and his pathetic excuses 3 goddess as fiance but he wants to not upgrade his cultivation because it will gain attention to him like building 5star Empire in year is being very low profile he is adding one more goddess and still think he will keep low profile by staying at low cultivation level
This is less of a review, more of a first impression as I have read 20+ chapters while writing it. So my opinion might be incomplete. I apologize if something like that happens and would like others to correct me.I would like to start by thanking the author for his hard work and for such an amazing story. It has been quite a long time since I have read a web/light novel with a grounded and realistic MC as well as a well-built world setting.The story started with brief background information on how it all started and necessary information about different levels. It was a nice touch and magnificently done. I liked the temperament of MC. He is intelligent yet has the thought process of 13 years old. He is responsible but doesn't give the feeling of an old man in a young boy's body. His reaction to gaining his sight back, his way to deal with money, or his reaction to his current situation is all realistic, at least as realistic as it can be in a fantasy world. He is not like a typical LN/WN MC who thinks "I am gonna murder this guy's three-generation because he disrespected me by making fun of me" not is he a pushover. He handled his situation like a mature person with a hint of teenage flair (talking about that Middle-finger scene). Overall he is a pretty likable character.The magic system seems pretty simple and easy to follow. I don't have to check again and again which level is after what. The world setting is good so far, not too confusing. The pacing of the story is good so far. It is not going too slow or too fast. But I think there is some space to improve regarding these topics.So far I have talked about the good things of the story. Now let's talk about the things that can be improved.First thing, Proofreading. The story is mostly well written. But there are quite a few mistakes in grammar and sentence making that could have been avoided with a more round of checking. The number and frequency are not that high but still, it hinders the immersion.Next, supporting character development. If first 22 chapter is any indication, I think the author should spend a bit more time developing supporting/minor characters. We have only 1 noticeable supporting character till chapter 23 and it's Greg. He is hinted to be a main supporting cast and good friend of MC. But do we know anything about him other than he is rich and talented? We don't know anything about Greg as a person or feel connected to him. If it is solved in the latter part of the story then it's ok. However, I think it should have been much sooner.The world-building and background description are also much to be desired. For example, it helps the readers to visualize if you give a brief description of the Room MC is living in or the market and its shops when he went out shopping. Maybe a bit more description about people and environment when he went out for the first time after his sight was back. this would have helped us feel connected to the MC more.This part is some selfish request as a reader.Please keep the MC realistic and relatable like this. Don't make him like a thousand other MC whose improvement doesn't follow any logic or common sense. I am still miffed about that 120 points in the practical exam. MC has been blind and malnourished throughout his all life. Moreover, He doesn't exercise or haven't practiced the practical part at all. Suddenly 5 days after getting his sight back, He is using martial arts routine accurately and smoothly. And in these 5 days, he had to gather mana for the exam, learn how to read and write, prepare for the theoretical part of the exam and go out sightseeing. It is almost physically impossible for him to do this properly, no matter how easy the routine was. The craziest part is he got more points than Greg who is practicing longer than MC, has better development, and seems like a genius in martial arts. Please don't do things like this. Don't throw logic out of the window to bring sudden growth to MC or sudden character development. Please introduce a romantic interest but not a harem please. we have more than enough harem plot on this site. what we are lacking is a meaningful, non-harem romance. Please fill that void.
Wow, I truly love how Mike met his end,serves him right
Sounds like a good story but it is too long for me.
Totally didn’t expect that ! What a great twist ! Thx for the 2 chapters ! Happy Thanksgiving from your Canadian reader xx
great read. love this book
Absolutely loved this book. Great read just like the first book ......