It's a nice read especially when you use the audio feature (which many people don't know exists, for some reason) But the author needs an editor, proofreader or just do it themselves. personally, I use Grammarly along with a read aloud app so I can edit while I listen to the story being read to me. YOU NEED THIS! especially for the first few chapters. I'm not perfect either but I try to minimise the grammar errors because it's one of the major turnoffs in a story. I like the story concept as well.* If anyone's interested in giving my novel "The Epic Adventures of Maou and Shelly" a read (I promise it's good. use the audio feature if you have it.)
Hey! this is the author. I really appreciate you guys taking time to read it. Every kind of criticism and review are welcomed! Thanks a lot for reading it! ❤️❤️
First review I’ve ever done on a novel after reading quite a few. This novel I feel is only getting started . Originally I thought the main character was going to be an emotionless villain who only cares about himself but as the story continues we can slowly see him being more expressive. I also quite like how this romance has its up and downs and isnt just a Mc and mindless fl. I usually like books with harem aspect but this one has me invested to the point I paid for all locked chap. Wouldn’ mind harem tho, would feel bad if aurora is thrown aside . I feel at some point soon mc will also have a very dinamic change as far as emotions and personality goes. What we know of him is still a mystery which I would like to see slowly start to unravel. We know he has a impressive family background which is being hinted at constantly. I do hope that it doesn’t turn out like a cultivation novel where we have to wait 2000 chaps for it to happen. Overall will keep reading this book , normally not the type to read urban novels due to how short they tend to be compared to fantasy. would like to see more descriptive details about side characters as a refresher to what they look like .
Pls add the Futanari Tag so others dont waste money like me. .
author, are you ever gonna come back to this, or should I give up the thought? I've been waiting for at least nearly 3 years at the time of writing this. dated 10/26/2024
Nice work dude, keep it up. I'm also new here so let's support each other. Keep going.??????????????????????????????
Novels tell stories but not this oneThis is a textbook where the author rambles about geography, it is either forest, ocean or mountain, don't be surprised if it is monotonous what with the severe lack of creativity The mc does a bunch of random things each chapter with no plan or goals, mc is hence bland and boring, as expected from a guy who monologues each chapterMc is an idiot which is common in novels where the mc has unlimited power but a mind of a 10 year old, this is the consequence of no character development after all how can you have character development with no conflict (overpowered mcs from the start rarely have conflicts) yet some authors can pull it of but not this one Overall it gives the impression that the author has no idea that there are readers, therefore spending each chapter rambling about random things with no flow or planning (why post a novel online when all you do is indulge in yourself)My conclusion: This is a textbook and not a novel, the only way to avoid this is to plan your work and get opinions from friends and readers.
I am starting to get interested the more I read.Keep it up author!I liked the all three books!Recommend them to everyone!
just another ctrl+c ctrl+v novel.mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmhmhmhmhmhmhmhmhhmmhhmmhmhgmhmmhmhmhmhmmhmmhmhhmmhmhmh
*saw featured original novel* clicked (because the cover and the title hooked me) thought, is this gonna be the same typical novel again ? (read the synopsis) oh i smell original plot. *Read the first chapter right away* .... in the middle of the 1st chapter, Suddenly press back, Me : "are you sure this an original novel instead of translated ?" (Read the coments) "oh. Its damn original." "F*** ! My lucky day !!!! No wonder god woke me up exactly 1:59 a.m. because of horror dream which i dont want to recall ever again." to think that i would found this masterpiece ! MUAHAHA IM BLESSED !SERIOUSLY ! THANK SO MUCH AUTHOR !!! I SUPER DUPER LOVES THIS NOVEL ! ALL HAILL LORD POTATO !!! />
I feel that this book is overlooked, it's really quite good. Sure there are some things that could be better. Such as the pacing being a little to fast, the spontaneous situation changes and what not. Considering not just everyone can write a good book, I think it's fair to say that this is better then a good bit.
You should make this light novel into mangaThis story really has a potentialIf you want i can help you find manga artists, who knows it will be a great feat