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havent read this yet but i have a question, since they are gonna get married and have a daughter in the future, whats the point in his daughter telling him to contact and date her if its gonna happen eventually? what if they come together at an earlier time than that future, then that daughter wouldn't exist because of the timing. ?
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A good start, found it interesting. Then the author got hit on the head by a flying pig. We get Beasts attracted to the MC. Then we get MC becoming a body cultivator. Then we get MC. All the while, losing the Attractiveness System.
It's like playing a MOBA game then suddenly you're playing a Music game, then it changes to a text-based novel game even before completing a level.
The shift in story lore Nd background is very disturbing. Very hard to keep track of what is happening. The author might have been going for Inception style of writing, or something like Dr. Strange. Just doesn't go well in writing.
Honestly, the story is wayy too inconsistent. The mc has high attractivness to the monsters and beast but some beasts keep attacking him despite that, He was even able to control an owned beast before so why are weaker beast even thinkig of atckinghim this story is wayy tooo inconsistent
This is a intersting story from what has been written so far. I am intrested in what will happen next. What I say is my opion and suguestion to help your book become better so please don't take it the wrong way
Firstly for me, It was not scary. When I read Horror/Thiller books with are nomarly Steven King. I want to be right there with the MC expericing the horror and the diolage that is written now if given more details to the world and the backround to make me feel like i am there can work. The chapters that you repeated the same dilolage twice is a clever use of diloage and can be used if it is altered in such a way that it is from the other persons perpesive.
In genreal this is a good book and has the potional to be a great horror book
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Really like the storyline; the way you delivered the story was just awesome. I hope i get to read such beautiful creations by you Ganbari tsudzukeru ~!~
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