So far, an interesting novel with nice lessons from the father character, as well as an interesting storyline. However, in the first chapter, there are too many commas in each sentence and many run-on sentences. It gets better after that chapter, but there are still many wrong tenses used, the characters don't really speak their age, and there's incorrect character quotation punctuations and capitalizations (ex- "back then, these were the days!." should become "Back then, those were the days!" To the author, I suggest researching a bit more on quotations by reading physical books in the english language).But these are all pretty small things if you ignore them and just read the story. Pretty good overall, I would definitely keep reading if the author releases more chapters. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see what happens next!
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This is translation review, not novel review. If you are not familiar with it, webnovel has started westernizing most of the novels in 2021. This is awful practice that kills original novel. At best you get only names, places and organizations westernized and at worst you get half novel gutted and other half totally rewritten by translator. With best case scenario you get only names, places and organizations westernized which introduces plotholes cause while names are westernized, actual writing and character culture arent. You get chinese way of thinking, chinese places and organizations translated into most famous western (USA) alternatives and as a result you see absurdity.And with the worth case scenario, you are not actually reading original authors work, but some "translators" plagiarization cause half novel is removed (sometimes critical explanations) and other half is badly rewritten. And cause this requires so much work compared to normal translation, either webnovel is stealing original authors work and rewriting it (cause most of those novels dont come from qidian) or they are just using translators that dont know chinese so they are rewriting story with help of MTL (seen too many edited MTL translations lately on webnovel). overall any westernized novel deserves automatic 1 star review.
I think that its great and I cant really find any faults with it, the quality is brilliant unlike many other novels on this app and I think the plot is set up in a brilliant way to keep you reading and wanting more tp find out the mystery of the game and I just generally love the feel and the tempo. The only downside is that I caught up to the most recent chapter. Another thing I like about it is that the author doesn’t spend too much time on mundane stuff so you don’t get bored whilst reading it. 10/10 #wouldrecomend
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This is a good novel.Like it up until now.Just wanted to show my support for author.Hope you win the competition. Now to complete word limit:$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$S$$$$$$$$$$$$$€$$$$$$$$$$¥$$$$$$$$$$$$$$$
more like I HAVE A MANSION IN A POST APOCALYPTIC WORLD.
The book is basically the best I've read so far that has to do with hacking, teaching and slice of life.... Please do continue the book... Faithful readers like me might grow old out of frustration for dropping such wonderful books ????
What it up with the writing? I swear that I spotted a spelling mistake, but it was fixed in a blink of the eye! Sneaky!And whats up with the updating? So far it have been one update per day at minimum, how are you supposed to be able to keep that going? And you even publish more chapters some days!Is the MC developing? I mean he gets lots of OP stuff, but how is he supposed to be able to use them? And there is a lot of foreshadowing for further developments, but can we trust them? So far it seems we cannot trust that things goes as they should at all!Whats with the characters? They are totally awesome! Keeps distracting one from the lack of names!And what is with the world background? There is totally no info dumps! Everyone loves info dumps!Regardless of everything, this novel is a clear 5.0, no bias.