Got to the second chapter before I had to put this down. Author, too much inconsistency. Stating the MC can't react in time and gets knocked out by a little kid. Then saying he has super speed as a trait. Later he dodges bullets and knocks out a grown man with a rock. 20 kph is actually slow, look it up. Ryan is 16 but he acts and thinks like an 8 year old. The police would never leave a minor alone in their house after their parents death. He would be ushered to his next of kin or whoever's agreed to take care of him. A little advice- use google to find out facts before you start writing and stating things as if they are truth. Can't help but imagine someone running full out but moving like a geriatric with a walker. I wish you good luck with your novel, and every thing.
Love the story keep it up the story is interesting. There are a few flaws in the story but it's still good. Give it a try when I will warn you. It may be a little bit dark for you so if you're a bit on the sensitive side read it
I love it, love it, absolutely love it, wholeheartedly love it..............................................................................................................................................
Wonderful plot. Historical romance described in the Egyptian setup. NICE...Brewing romance in the middle of misunderstanding, very interesting.Overall Review: Very interesting story, the characters are well built and the plot isn't rushed. You can just imagine the story in your head as you read the words and images will unfold with the description... anyways that's what happens for me when I read a good book ;) just like a movie!Suggestion: Few paragraphs are too long so you can break them into smaller ones for better readability.Kudos. :)
This book is promising. I instantly love the characters. I hope I can get to know them better in the coming chapters. And longer chapters, please.
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Good story of a magic swordsman reincarnated into a futuristic world. I really like the hardworking MC and how the setup for the magic swordsman blending into a mecha is coming along. Hoping for more world building and to learn more about mechanics, magic and our illusive system.
Love it
Basically a ripoff of “Beginning after the end” some of the lines are the same he hes a black dragon he wore a mask when he was an adventurer and other stuff.
Ok, so the synopsis itself is eye-catching and attracted me to the story. The grammar is fine and well written, I await how the story will turn out to be!!!