Pretty good context of the story, the grammar needs a little bit tweaking but the word choice is good, Also the act scenes need a little bit tweaking too
For the love of all things holy or perhaps in this case unholy, please choose this book. The supernatural is a lot of fun in this, although the beginning might make some people think twice, there’s a reasonable explanation for it. Honestly, there just isn’t enough ghost novels on this platform, so seeing this getting picked up would be a welcome change of pace. I’d like to see that.
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This one is unique.I only see like this in faloo please keep it up for us readers❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
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The grammar is really bad consisting almost entirely of run on sentences....................................................................
Ch19 - It's slow and feels super dry MC - I want to relate to this guy.....working a shitty job with an education background that could have got him something better, whilst surrounded by shitty colleagues but the Author just makes him come off like I'm meant to despise him.MC background - Has parents in the village, Has two Uni degrees, doesn't know martial arts - Yet author will always remind you of his degrees and tell you that he knew how to fight and he doesn't carry a umbrella cos he's a real MAN. World background - Gym, gym, gym gym, dorm and a abandoned factory. Side characters - His best friend has the most depth, Id like to see a story on him and his messed up relationship with his wife.
I’ve read the first 75 chapters so far and find the story interesting. The writing while not the best keeps you interested in the story and each chapter is better than the last.The transitions between the point of view (POV) don’t flow smoothly especially at the beginning however the tone is consistent. The chapters are at a decent length (aka not too short).I added the story to my library as i am looking forward to how the story progresses and improves.Theres not a lot of world developement in the 1st 75 chapters but there is character development for 2 of the characters. Some of the development of the main character could have been explained more before the multiple time jumps.
Intriguing plot, I like doomsday stories so I gave it a try. This story has much potential and develops well, good job author, good luck and happy writing.