I'm proud of this and am excited to both continue the story and improve it. Please leave any comments or feedback
It's too draggy but interesting, I love how the ml love the twins but it's focused too much on the twins. The pace is too slow, I hope the author also focussed on the surroundings not only to the twins and the ml. Though I like it, since I like kids.
why wouldn't i give my book five stars? you think I'm stupid?
review for event fp don't mind it lllllllll
only novel that has kept my attention for over 400 chapters at a timeI am fully up to date on the story and some of the issues I had with the mc, he has fixed, so the people complaining about it, like before chapter 300, don't have enough patience and only like perfect mcs with no character growth
This is another review of mine, focusing more on criticism. this novel has 2 problem the first one is typos which is not really a problem because the author update everyday, which is tiring. the second one is the way it's written it could be better, in the first few chapters this was a problem but as story progress this become less a problem. But this is just a recommendation on how the author can improve his writing which works like this.Cao Cap: i Will destroy you liu bei for attacking my territoryLiu Bei: Haha! go on and try cao cao! this is the day you fall! try doing this-Cao cao was angry and anxious of what's happening on his territory because of the sudden attack of liu bei causing him to be angry which result in continously screaming at liu bei, while liu bei simply taunt and with full confidence trimuphly think that this is the day his archenemy falls.As the story progress i noticed this happening which improved the story on another lvl but it would be appreciated if this type of writing become a norm and continue progressively, while i don't see any problem with the former the new way of writing cause its quality to improved.
for this only being 7 chapters (so far) i absolutely love it!
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Then they continued their journey. It was a one day journey, so they reached Yotsuba Island the next morning without any accident. Mike learned some navigation skills from Tomo on the way and Momoo followed the ships from behind. The villagers still feared him but not as much as the first time when they ran away after seeing him.
Elizabeth's family didn't live far from school. It took him less than an hour to walk back.
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