good novel, but is it to hard to just check for grammar mistakes, i mean theres not a lot, but from you writing i can tell that it is sloppy mistakes, so please proof read it so that the story flows better. keep up the work :D
so far I've read 15 chapters and figured it's time to leave a review I haven't found a single flaw with your writing the story is great the character development is phenomenal I'm getting cultivation online vibes but with a twist and I love it this book is definitely worth reading !
Ummm... What? First time I heard of this novel...Synopsis doesn't look that interesting and it kind of doesn't give too much details, but hey, there are a lot of novels out there where the summary doesn't look good but once you start reading, you're hooked. ≧ω≦Waiting for this novel to be released... I hope it's good..
Don't you dare think for one second that this is a typical overpowered MC. No. This novel is much more than that. The MC has transcended the typical MC tropes. The trope that I would associate with him is that of a villainous young master who thinks he is on the top of the world, except this time he is. You can already guess from the first 10 chapters about what kind of story it would be. Such a shit novel.
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A shameless review and a proper review to post since the novel has reached 100 chapters. So, I would like to establish some thoughts about what you should expect from these 100 chapters.- My writing was decent, and at the beginning of the novel, it was kind of unstable since I was still trying to play with my words. And my style at that phase was not actually accepted by the mass, so I changed it slowly. I can't tell if my writing has improved since it is hard to self-edit since I can't notice my mistakes. Should I hire an editor? It would be impossible since I don't have money and don't have much time to send plenty of chapters to an editor.- The story wasn't established as I wanted to show that the MC was aimless, or rather doesn't have a specific goal to stay except going to the Immortal Heaven where immortals live. It was kind of messy, I agree since all of the encounters the MC had weren't that long. But along with it, after chapters 50 and above, there will be some sign of the plot. And truth be told, the plot was too slow.- Long side stories to make the world background more introduced. But not to the point that it won't be connected with the MC. All of the side stories were made for the plot and a path for the MC's journey.- The character design was a bit off, you may say. He is an immortal sage but still acts like a kid? Well, it will be for character development and part of the plot and discussions about the MC. [May contain spoiler] MC had abilities sealed, but some were activated every time. One of the examples is the Absorption Body, which works with mana and Qi, and I am saying that he also has mind abilities. Let's say that there were some side effects that he still didn't notice as he didn't pay much attention to them since it was natural for him at this point. And I'll mention that in these 100 chapters, only once or twice is his personality pointed out, so in the future chapters you will learn more about the MC.- What to expect in these 100 chapters might have been mentioned but I am getting excited with the world background and the MC's background story. Proper background story to understand the MC more.- The cultivation part, well, the Heaven where the MC was, is the weakest of them all. So, I am telling you that in the upper heavens, you will see what cultivation is. There were mystical arts, and some strong techniques, so expect more when the MC lays his feet on the upper heavens.So, my style wasn't really acceptable and not that good since I started messing up with the readers' thoughts. I also did that with my other work and have still not learned since it comes naturally. So, if it is tolerable, thank you for staying with me.
Original and very catchy cover page! The novel is well polished! The first thing I have noticed while reading your story, was the language. Good one! You don't struggle, like most of us, with tenses, style or grammar. The storyline is interesting, characters are expressive.Well done!
[At chapter 54]. Would have been great if author didn't make main character a 3 year old kid. Introduced parents and then immediately abandoned them.
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better not read it's disappointing, It's an orc tribe yet he names his army like those lame chinese name and there ar more but you can decide after you read a few chapters. It's almost good but author keeps me disappointed with his plot.
One of the rare action packed novel which has a well done smooth romance. Even without romance, the novel would be definetly one of the best. The mana system is pretty interesting and several thing are yet to be revealed. The emotions the people feel before going to the battlefield feel real as though you are going there yourselves without compromising the negative aspect of being in the army. The author does a superb job with Emotions. The thing i hope the author continues focusing on is the mc personality and so far he's done it wonderfully. Definetly recommended.....a bit of spoiler(opinion based)i hope the author does not go normal route of killing liiza(saying this because my poor heart wont be able to handle the shock? and i am genuinely curious if they dont seperate or she is trapped or some misfortune befalls to her and is used as a motivator for khan)
This is a very good reincarnation style cultivation novel bringing martial arts from our world to another. The main character is awesome and the story is lovely. Best of all it's already mostly translated so once it gets here it shouldn't take long to be another complete story. Vote. Vote hard it's worth it!