The story is interesting and has potential... I'm very intrigued by how the Hunter System would be as the story moves forward... However, the concept of the system itself needs a bit of background or introduction for readers who are not familiar and only starting to read system novels like me... Also, your book has so much dialogue, at least 75% I think. It kind of looks like a movie script or a manga / comic... It's not bad but when I try writing like that, I get a harsh rejection from my editor... "remember that you're writing a book not a script"... those are Webnovel's words from writing guidelines.
they are not the novel to be read in the random so much for the novel
a good book worth reading ...............
The novel sometimes feels like the chapters are out of order or missing. MC likes “hunting for prey” to sleep with and harasses women
"Thinking".
The Monster kicked the door and the door opened. "Carl! Come here now!"
The prompt jolted him out of admiring the breathtaking environment he found himself in. Hmm, I don't want to be known. Standing out in this game would bring me trouble in the real world, but at the same time, I want to create a better future for my sister and me. Anonymous, yep that is what I want to be.
Me:and my names lucifer Morningstar
[Congratulations You have learn Random Teleportation]
in a room full of cluttered clothes toys stuff of babies, there lay 2 children along with their father. the firstborn is on the left side while on the right is the 2 month old baby. the baby cries interrupting his father typing his story.
Raynare, who had until now been in her human `Yuuma Armano´ form, transformed back into her real self.
keep going