The story is interesting on its own but it still needs a lot of improvement. I'm sure it has potential so keep up with writing the story.
Great story so far!!It is very hard to find a decent novel with a non-human MC. For me, this story ticks all of the correct boxes.
Tbh I came by this book the first time and well it didn’t look like it had any potential ??but damn as I swung by the second time, the author was cooking completely, everything is detailed, the worldbuilding is well done, cliffhangers that’ll leave you gaping for more chaps ?and it deserves support so be a real reader and give some support to this man
Trust my previous review...........................................................................................................................
masterpiece
I haven’t read yet but I’m commenting cause I’m 90% sure there was another author that got their novel taken down after using ZeniMax properties. The term Dragonborn is almost directly related to Elder Scrolls. Idk if author knew this, but it might be better to use different vocabulary. Synopsis looks really interesting though.
And immediately Pak Rioy asked Mr. Sange "So Mr. Sangefull, what are the details of your problem."
*clank* the gate began to reverberate, as it began to split we were greeted with another dark room, can they just put some lighting to put up the boss room vibe.
Fukase...now, changed his mind and thinks that this is way more of good move for now. Fukase is now in a deep thinking for he thinks that there is something wrong with him.
PUNCH
"I would never, baby," he pauses, 'so, because he wanted to take you away, I got rid of him." I'm astounded having not remembered any of this, but everything is starting to go into place. He continues," afterwards, I got a job that required a lot of effort, and away jobs, handling guns and things like that. I wished I could be there for you, but he kept me away from you. He hurt you when you were playing, said you 'fell off the tree' but I'm sure he pushed you."
"Mom you dont need to worry about that . The man is already in the dungeon, so relax. We wont let him get away with it