Tried for 10 chapters and couldn't go any further.
Mary sue of a character, author say's she can do martial art's but can't even defend herself from one bastard. Ml always being the knight in shing armor which would be fine if it didn't happen every time and she just freezes like a deer in headlights. And mind, you, we are going to be up against dangerous criminals and terrorist in this novel. You're just better off reading a chinese novel.
Every thing is good except the way stretch a simple chapter into a complicated one.... bruh I got it that u want a goof world build, but it's just too much man u just gives info of 1 villain for 2 chapters n in third chapter he'll just die!! What is the freaking reason is there to give so much elaborate character, it's not even helping in world building, it just make it really boring, a simple 3 chapter arc is stretch out to 30 chapters just because of some nonsense, and what the freak is DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DI E DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE 30X what is this bruh ... just fill up the pages u do this isn't is too greedy of you
I see the comments in the first three chapters and I don't know what to say. The readers are complaining about grammar most of the time, they forget to see the story itself, the character is that topical brainless muscle headed, for what I can see. The world is average, so as the story development. There's too many things to improve, but the idea is amazing, and the author must persist if he can improve.
this is really serious like OwO like gives a lot for me to imagine, as I was reading this, i'm like 'girl, we gotta keep waiting for the next update'
Interesting to read, story development is a bit catchy and you would wanna hope to see where it goes next. Good work to the author....... More characters should be added though
ok first of all you said his potential is SSS and even messi and ronaldo are only SS so why tf was he still struggling against a Japanese players☠️☠️☠️, and also his system don't even help much too I don't know what was going on when you were writing this also the mc stay too long in Japan
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i kept reading and expecting to understand it but still failed. too bad a writing if the readers don't get it.
I like fighting scenes and how the story steadily progresse. The overpowered main character is a plus too.I also like the fact that its not a generic harem. One heroine is more than enough.
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