pretty good, waiting for more.
Thank you so much for your hard work to revise the 51 chapter . I really like the lemon scene now . Hopefully you will be able to make it through the last chapter . As always thanks for the great work
Really liking the leviathan book author wrote. Has many other good reads. But this one’s my fave so far. Waiting for next updates. ??
So the writing quality is decent. Though lack of proper punctuation does make it confusing sometimes. Overall it’s readable and doesn’t feel like a translation. The story is pretty good. You get fairly invested in the story. I’d say the only real issue is the only character you get invested into is the mom in the beginning. The MC is quite bland. Doesn’t feel very human. Sophie the system girlfriend is just the MC worshipping type. Which once again anyone who’s had a girlfriend/ wife understands that’s a pretty unrealistic quality. Even when someone loved you the whole worship/ none of their own thoughts outside how great the MC is, is a bit of a character fault.I’d say there are two more faults that caused me to not go further with the story, and these might be deal breakers for other readers as well. Unfortunately these tend to be heavily overused on WN:1.) very redundant writing. I think this comes from more inexperienced writers trying to hit word counts in their chapters. However there are a lot of “filler” paragraphs in the chapters. Such as saying the same thing multiple times in a different way. As well as reiterating the same thing, or re-explaining things multiple times. Unfortunately the writing is not very concise. Even in the first 30 chapters I found myself skimming over multiple paragraphs as a result.2.) possibly the most overused device on webnovel and something that I personally detest as a reader. However, different people like different things. The “leaving the reader in suspense trope”. Prime example is chapter 26. MC gets a gacha spin, and the writer really draws out the scene. We’re talking half a chapter to just spinning a roulette wheel; mc and Sophie’s emotions, fear, etc… Just as the wheel stops, time skips and the reader doesn’t know what the wheel landed on. As a reader that’s just annoying. Don’t have me read 8000 words on a roulette spin to skip what it is. As I said maybe some people enjoy this device; however, I personally detest it. As a reader I prefer experiencing the world as the characters do. Unfortunately this novel has had quite a few instances of storyline incongruity. Where time skips forward, then a chapter later we find out what happened during the mini skip. Anyway the story isnt bad, and for more patient readers it may be a masterpiece. As for me personally some of the writing elements are not very attractive. As a result i wouldnt read, nor would i suggest it.
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I love the FL Michelle, she is savage and reaaaaly clever, The autor is great at presenting internal monologues and overall at character design. I'm really looking forward to who the ML will be, I hope nothing happens to the 8th prince. Thank you very much, author, keep up the good work ❤️
not too bad so far. still waiting for more to be sure
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Your Author here! So excited about this new book. It's so enjoyable to write it so I'm truly hoping that you all enjoy this thrilling ride as well. More updates coming soon! Got loads of chapters stocked up already!
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Thank you for writing an interesting story
Despite the grammar issues, the story is very intriguing, and it doesn't lack the 'thriller' effect.I very much enjoyed reading it, and hope the author will be kind enough to present us with more chapters! ??????