"Shit!" Aaron cursed, flinching at his sister's hungry whine. He started making his way to the kitchen before stopping in thought. He turned back to Jackson.
"So tall, is he even under 25?"
Only twenty-ish chapters in and I’m loving this, I love how there are side effects from the previous life and she has to build her skills. Can’t wait to read more✌️
interesting premise. please don't abandon it like so many on here.
Thousand of axe summon from each direction. It did lot of damga. The monster was half way damge.
Ok ok, you've got my attention, A better version of Tyranny of Steel so far, atleast that's what I think... Let's see where the story goes...
This work will surely catch readers' attention from the first chapter. The flow of reading is smooth while still giving vivid descriptions of character and the scenery.But you should consider narrating in past tense, since it's most appropriate for narration. Also, in a sad scene, you should scan for opportunities to amplify the emotions through your pacing. Overall, the flow of your story is well executed, and I really liked it.
I have read the info and it's amazing. I honestly think this content that will put in this story is unique since I haven't seen this kind of setting.
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Any romance now or in the future?
A lovely start, good pacing to build up the character and his rebirth. However, the fact that English isn't your first language is noticeable, I highly recommend the free Grammarly plugin, it should help catch a bunch of the errors. Keep it up!
Good story! You actually made de mc loss of humanity seem realistic, considering the circumstances and all the characters feel alive too.The only bad thing about the story so far is that there are not enough chapters.