Review update.Okey typos are still present. A lot. But story is kinda good I say? Im interested enough in characters and plot, but its too slow paced atm. Im not sure how many thousands of chapters it will take to end.World background needs better explanations, not longer. Better.Also story gets better the futher you are in.Writing needs editor. REALLY.
The story has a common beginning but the one thing that got me out of it is the simple that the mc is inconsistent and the plot is all broken how the mc doesn't think that even with him getting beaten to death regularly and everyone he knows KNOWS of this and he doesn't care is the worst part, no empathy or connection to be created with characters like that. (his friend knows because she studies with him and there is a background that makes it obvious and his family once again knows why mc himself spoke with them.)
Is it just me or is leonel a 12 year old? it's painful to read due to how immature he is. But still good novel tho. I just hope leo died somehow. Kekw.
Looks good enough to give a read. Hoping my brain cells would not die.???. OoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooO
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Does any know the raw name or have the link? I know this didn't get picked to be continued
I really would like to know what happens next as the way you have written this is really interesting. like being able to reach FTL 2000 years ago through something a child could make is an interesting idea.
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Give you 5 star .. .. .Please dont drop this and updatr more chapter. .. .maybe someday he can use rasengan. ..And i like the part the mc little harem. ..
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The story started great and went on quite well despite having some issues. Towards the latest chapters the story quality has dipped quite sharply. The world building and generally the whole premise of the novel is great and innovative with a fresh breath of air. The only slightly problem that I found is the Shadow Guide. It is an absolute concept inside this novel and a lot of times you will it acting as plot armor , the author forcing situations and as well narrowing the future paths of the plot. Like if someone has a higher rank than you , he can kill you almost anytime he wants (either in an ordeal or in the mirrror universe). The skills that affect your rank or the shadow guide can't be count upon as they are quite common if you are a player.Then we have the characters. They started great , they had their own personalities , problems, strengths. Despite the later down the line the character "development" is quite disappointing. Jake doesn't really improves on the character department. He is still the anti-social , sligtlu proscratinating guy he was. Whenever a girl gets too close to Jake she suddenly gets a stroke and gets removed from the equation for dumb reasons. Also the gang that follows Jake distance themselves from said girls that got the stroke like she is the plague for no fucking reason. For example Amy who was indebted to Jake and saw him as leading figure who pretty much ensured her extended survival , suddenly becomes a fangirl over an earth ex-celebrity who doesn't have any real advantage over Jake at the moment. Moreover before she saw said celebrity guy it was talked how important is to choose your faction as you are pretty much giving your life away to them if you don't have sufficient strength ( we didn't see any noticable talent of hers). Then there is Sarah who had gotten like a lot of attention and development and had evolved from her bitchy , self-centered , cheerleader-like behavior to somewhat more tolerable and smart (which she was) version turn into a brain-dead puppet. She gets close to Jake (like romanticaly) and the author is like trying his hardest to "kill" her off. She does some bad decisions with her bloodlines but nobody from the group is willing to provide the slightest of help and when her bloodlines are acting up everyone behaves like they don't why that happens and distance themselves from her. Even Jake who knows first hand how dealing with said bloodlines could be , does nothing to help Sarah in any possible form or be understanding to why she acts like that. Even his own bloodline which in terms of detriments is a lot tamer can influence his behaviour. He acts oblivious to her advances despite knowing very well her intentions and he is almost like purposefuly teasing her. Now we are in a situation that Sarah is like Amy to the group "dead" as I doubt Ark was gonna ammend their relationship.Lastly after December Ark has pretty much abandoned this novel. He was all about promising about keeping up with late chapters and stuff but in the end he just ended up owing more chapters. We are understanding about his personal matters but you can't promise repeatedly and never deliver. We aren't idiots. Then he anounces that he got another main novel started when he can't even do one chapter/day for his already established novel. Pretty bad work ethics and it seems like he takes us loyal readers as a given (we aren't).Read this on your own discretion.
Awesome story, gonna binge once the next chappies are out.. What else can I say? The author has great grits to do this novel. The number of chappies out is proof. Keep it up, dear author. May your write more, enjoy more, and learn more!