On the one hand, the story's good.On the other hand, the translation's kinda bad. No, it's *really* bad, particularly a few chapters in where the chat comments get messed up.If you can stomach that, though, it's a good read.
The characters are also well done and fleshed out and the action scenes are also excellent.The kingdom building is pushed which makes the story excellent. The grammar is also well done, just a few errors here and there but they hardly affect the story. As I mention in my reviews, there are stories with horrible grammatical errors that are more popular than this hidden gem and make no mistake, this is a hidden gem.
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your novel is not perfect, but I did not say I don't like it, harem, the battle not bad.your grammar is same as me, the wrong spelling same. Out of all not perfect, but I'll keep it.
Read up to chapter 20 and it’s good so far. Instead of other novels in this genre where the MC is a cringe ”alpha male” and the FLs are all mas*chists with room temperature IQ, MC pulls out his uno reverse card and despite not being a good person and being the villain in the setting makes himself out to be the hero and the hero to be the villain. It could still be done a bit better IMO by using a bit more subtlety and using his system and acting skills to make it out like he’s a misunderstood good guy. Certain scenes and development though do feel somewhat rushed at times, and almost everything that happens the MC directly tells to the FL which I think weakens things. Instead of coming across as a 200 IQ 3D chess player that convinces the FLs that he’s a good person and the protagonist is ‘evil’ while not appearing to be involved at all, it’s more like an ad*lt lying to a gullible kid and they believe it no questions asked. An example is instead of letting the FL “sneak behind the MC’s back” to ask if the protagonist got married to 3 other girls, the MC tells her to go and ask. In the future having the FLs “accidentally discover” things would improve the novel IMO. Things people “figure out” by themselves are always more believable to them. (Another example would be like if the MC gets injured protecting an FL somehow, instead of saying “look I got injured protecting you, I demand a kiss as compensation” or some other cringe line, MC ”tries to hide” his injury and the FL “discovers” it and realizes he cares about her enough to hide it so she doesn’t worry about him) Stuff like that where MC has a more behind the scenes role would make things funnier imo. Overall though the novel is quite good, and I think it’s a breath of fresh air from the nonsense I have to sift through on this platform on a daily basis. It reminds me of “Regressor instruction manual” with Light KiYoung a little bit if you’ve ever read that novel.
So far I am hooked in this story and I have to say author you are doing amazing so far keep it up man can’t wait for more chapter!Also if you haven’t read this novel give it a shot!
Not a bad story, only downside is that the author seems to have dropped it. They did make a comment on the last chapter using a different account a few months ago saying they would continue it but they never did.
I just have to say this this is the best novel i have read on webnovel •cringe ❌•too much complicated words❌•writing quality?•story line?•plot?I really am inlove with the author's writing style you are a big inspiration for me ?
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It's just not good... I wouldn't recommend this. As for why, look for the most liked reviews. - Coming from someone who have read the raw version of the novel.
Naisu! Naisu! Naisu! I'd say these three words only buh this is a review soooI wuv this novel! Everything's great! Characters, plot and all. Heck, those fight scenes keep me tied to it. ? Who knows, I may borrow your writing style.Welll, novel's great and I'm sticking with it! Keep up the good work author XD