Hi! This is Ada, an editor of the international Suspense/Thriller Writing Contest I. I see great potential in your book, but your book is so underrated here. Thus, I invited you to join the contest a week ago. Please reply to me. Let’s discuss in detail.
Ok, I will be honest with you all, this web novel is interesting and is going to become one of the famous ones, if it gets more chapter. The reason is pretty simple, it's because of the story and MC. Generally, MCs are naive and wimps but here our mc is too powerful, clever and ruthless. The story revolves around our mc trying to save his love. I believe its gonna be one heck of a story.
overall pretty good, can't even think of any constructive criticism..................................................................................
Bland. started off well. interesting concept. but story couldnt be carried well. author's main focus is on how many women can the MC collect. the mc literally doesnt see any female characters as friends but how good their bodies are and how to kiss them. has very good businesses under him granted by system. but doesnt care. registered as student. no classes. was an orphan. mentions missing the orphanage once but doesnt even care to go back to look at it or help them. all he does is go after one female after the another. and every female is attracted to him because he has money and is handsome.. dont mention anything about his character. plot repeats again and again.
*sigh* why must the author spoil such a good story concept with racism?why must the story be so cringe?why is the mc IQ so low?why?why?why?why?why?why?why?*sigh*
the mc is Lazy ........................................ ............ ..................... ........ ............................ .
Don't let the low chapter count fool you, each chapter though short has more story than 5-10 normal chapters. This story might give you whiplash from how quickly it develops. So 80 chapters actually equals 800 of another novel. Other than a problem with pacing the story is epic and full of imagination.Hold on to your hat, because mine blew away!!
Hi... do you remember me? *blush* I wasn't expecting to see you again in this place... is your house nearby...may I stop by *blush* hmm, sorry.I hope Larry does not become the type of person who will risk his own life to save a stranger, regardless of whether he will be neutral or a psychopath due to what happened to him.The story is excellent and exciting, making me enjoy the plot throughout the chapter. However, the lack of a description of the world is a deficiency, in my opinion, whereas the interactions between the characters are very entertaining.
You can ask questions here, there may be some discreet spoilers in the answers, so read this only if you think it will not ruin your reading experience.In the other review posted by me, there are also answers that could have spoilers, beware.
the MC is pretty dense and nieve, but his background and age kind of explain this. feels like a flawed person who doesn't always make the right choices, not like the author had him make dumb decisions for the plot. the story overall is pretty good and original. The pacing just seems off, I think it may be due to how much the MCs travel is detailed or details about background characters when it's not clear if they are important to the story.
I'm putting my time on the line for this seemingly unique Xianxia novel, hope I am not dissapointed
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