Hi?New reader hereSo far, I'm enjoying reading this novel.❣
1 chaptwrs in and it’s already bad enough for me to feel the urge to write a review for future readers of this novel lol anyways author can you hire an editor
I liked the first chapters. It moved a bit slow but is the only thing I can say against It. The characters are interesting and there are a few surprises. I like more lighthearted stories bit anyone that likes drama would enjoy it. ??✌???
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I really liked that the mc is straight forward and told that woman he didn't want trouble almost no others mc does that so I like that his really straightforward.
Written in this review is personal opinion no offenseWhen I've read the synopsis I thought it's good but the author keeps getting off track with the story and I can't emerse myself with it. So I'll stop reading it.
After finishing the book, I have to say that there were excellent points to the story and some not-as-great ones. Now my favorite moments in the story were that for most of the plots, the MCs had clear plot armor, like gaining new powers right when they needed it the most. Normally people frown upon plot armor, because it takes away tension if you know the MC won't actually lose. I love how the author constructed the plot armor to have an in-universe source, i.e. Ms. Kang and the Demon Lord, but it does have one problem. After the Demon Lord stops being able to manipulate the MCs' storylines, I feel that the MCs should have had a moment where they realize the extent of their previous plot armor, and perhaps had character growth as they realize they don't need it anymore. One point that I disliked was that Sakura's initial plot was supposed to be a thriller, but I think that the LGBT+ antagonism took away from the thriller plot. Now as someone who is actually bi, I don't have a problem with LGBT+. I just think that from a narrative standpoint, the reason Jason was a big antagonist was that he was transphobic, and I think Jason could have been developed more as a villain by having him kill off an acquaintance, rather than him just spouting transphobia every time he has a dialogue with Sakura. The biggest problem I had, though, was that the MCs were able to actually defeat the Demon Lord. Now I realize that they could because he let his guard down, but as soon as he was poisoned he could have just teleported away, and neutralized the poison, before returning to fight. Plus, as someone who was literally able to vaporize the entire Korean subcontinent, a fact the author seemed to gloss over, I don't think it would make in-universe sense for the MCs to think they could beat him. In-universe, that would be like someone shooting a shotgun at a nuke and expecting it to fall over, completely disarmed. I just think that perhaps the MCs themselves didn't have to defeat the Demon Lord. They could have forced a reincarnation spell on him, so he wasn't really defeated, but evicted. Or on the other hand, the Demon Lord could have either won, or let himself be killed and be like "this world bores me, but I didn't have the heart to commit suicide. so long, off to the next world" and that would have been a perfectly fine ending. Not that the original ending wasn't entertaining, it just didn't make sense worldbuilding wise. TLDR; just read it, it's a good book if you can suspend your disbelief for the ending.
Really horrible first impressions here, protagonist is a chinese guy who somehow through some strange magic manages to kill himself with a power outlet, I don't know how he'd do that in this day and age but fine.His name is now Garen and his dad's name is Lombart or some ****, the setting is industrial era europe~esque, or so the story says. Eauropean as in his sister whose name is Ying Er, who goes with him to Shengying Academy in Huaishan City. Person who sits next to him is called Ai Fei, yet strangely his only friend in the world is called Kalidor. Which beats Ai Fei but still sounds more like Warcraft than Europe to me. Just missing an M.Also, there's a bunch of nobles and peasants, cus you know nobles were so important in the 1800s right? (The era where middle class citizens did better than nobles, yet somehow this middle class protagonist is playing second fiddle to a bunch of noble brats...)Let's not forget about the training 'dojos' because everybody loved training with swords when revolvers became a thing right? Not like any idiot knows that firearms are the future at that point right? or that dojos specifically were never a thing in europe...Let's not forget about purple hair, cus people dyed their hair so much in the 1800s (hair dyes weren't really much of a thing till the 1950s), oh and let's not forget about mr. luo ya, whoever that is, but wait there's also a sharmilla. I think maybe that last name could pass for middle eastern, what do you think? Sound european enough yet?Yeah I didn't think so, this author has no idea wtf he's writing. Power outlet? nobody dies to power outlets outside of fucking movies, besides the fact that there's always a source for grounding somewhere around in modern houses (yes even in china) touching an outlet will only shock you and lock you in place for a couple seconds, you'd have to be touching that outlet for like 10 minutes at least for it to do any damage to you on it's own... Only way it could kill you so fast is if ti gives you a heart attack, but typically it won't do that so easily.The premise of the story is greatly flawed and the author doesn't know if he wants to use european names, chinese names or western fantasy names so he just uses a weird mix of all of them to make sure that nobody can remember wtf kind of setting this is in the first place...Idk how I'm supposed to read this. I'm only 3 chapters in man!
Hi guys this is your author Don here,Sorry for shamelessly writing a review for myselfthis is my first book so the writing quality might be low butill try my best to improve everything related to writing a bookplease bear with me ....oh if you want a story with op mc building a kingdom conquering nearby kingdoms without collecting beauties like trophies this is for you..
I absolutely love the characters, especially the teacher! I will be reading every chapter and some say that my personality is somewhat like the teacher as well! This is my favorite novel so far out of this entire app and I hope the author is able to keep up the good quality .
I find it stupid that people try to take this novel seriously and rate and review it. NO! What you're really here for is to read this god send novel full of incest, harem and a **** ton of sexs.Follow my lead brothers and stop pretending you hate it. Stop pretending to give bad reviews, afraid of others judging you. I say fk them. We all know that were horney fucks, we need materials and this god send novel supplys it, i wont lie i even couldn't make it past the chapter he fucks his mum cuz im to weak. I'll go into closed doors cultivation and return when im stronger. Atleast i know my limit and never give up unlike you bitches that run from the beginning. If you like it the say so, if not the quietly leave the room so my other brothers can come in. We ain't looking for good plot or character development, we just one the MATERIALS. Sigh if only the old hentai haven was still here i wouldn't have fallen this far.
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