The story has a good concept. With people studying Laws and becoming stronger, this whole idea has a huge scope for development.
But author has competely messed it up. His character goes from some Justice League type Hero to a guy who will kill anyone within 10-20 chapters. He happily demands money using intimidation. And honestly, I have no problem with it. But so fast? What about inner conflict? What about character development? His personality transition? Nope, nada. One moment he is talking about loving a girl because she is interesting, few chapters later he kill her without any remorse because she insulted him. What? Like honestly?
Next is the character. Robotic. Idiotic. He just goes on and on, no plans, no dreams and no personality. Heck, we don't even know how does he looks. What does he likes. His secret dream. Why does he want to get stronger. Nothing.
Above all, their is no planning in what he chooses. If you are given knowledge of all the things in your previous world, why not go with Quantum Forces, Energy, etc. Quite tough? What about gravity? Physics? Nuclear physics? But what he chooses? Cloud, fog, rain...
Anyway, it's authors personal choice but I wouod have liked to see some preplanning. Some thought in choosing your futures.
The cultivation system. It's weird. It's broken in a bad way.I can't describe it in any other way. Law difficulty and power makes no sense. Like Low God of Crow? What the hell did he study to achieve mastery of 'Crow'. And what makes a crow more complex than microorganisms which MC has chosen. And how did he merge ten laws to turn into a Crow law? Author is probably just bull****ting here. Similarly, what's long way? Law of Long way? Wtf? And believe me, it just gets weirder.
And like a cherry on a top...a rotten cherry. Editing. It's hard to understand anything they say. I have read better sentences while MTLing. Their are so many problems that I don't even know where to start. Some are quite minor, but the major ones make understanding anything impossible.
Author is also trying to make the world vast with a complex developed order structure and power structure. But all the laws just sound stupid and seem like an invitation for a full scale rebellion.
I have many more issues but that's it for now.
Author please get an editor. That itself will add a full three stars to the rating. We can ignore the rest, but poor editing just kills.of the mood to read anything.
i enjoyed reading this there are a few grammar Error but noting that would stop you from reading it cleary. the fighting scene sound awesome it very detail . Good job
I started this novel for fun, not realizing how stressful it would be to remain consistent with my upload schedule. I do believe it’s a great story but I started off ill prepared. I don’t want to make excuses for my poor schedule, but i do want to apologize to the reader than enjoy the story so far and are constantly being left on cliff hangers for weeks until the next chapter.Any feedback is appreciated, good or bad.
Just by reading the synopsis I can tell it’s going to be based off of League of Legends. I’m personally not a fan of these kind of work I prefer originals. If your into ‘fanfic’ this book probably for you...
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