Hooks you from the start...I like the way the chapters alternate characters. who ever you are, you're an incredible writer.
Its honestly unreadable with how bad the translation/grammar is. I dont know if it gets better in the later chapters, but my brain and my eyes can not deal with it.
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The Monster throw me away to the man. "This, do whatever you want. Where is the money?"
"I asked her. She can speak for herself." He watched the interaction between the two as the older Gonan nodded towards her friend as if to tell him it was ok, then she stood up.
The two had taken their conversation up into the air, both circling the other as they sized each other up.
"Stop discussing nonsense," Li Nuxie cut their small conversation. The waters surrounding the island was already a few meters deep, hence they need not ride a boat to the middle of the sea.
It's a cool place and they say it gets colder
"Yes sir!" I said happily. Thank God I got out of that offense so easily. This was truly great, I could feel it. I had a guardian angel watching out for me and keeping me safe.
You'll never know if you don't go
The ice we skate is getting pretty thin
You'll never know if you don't go