great read, no idea why there aren't any comments here
The translation is so bad that I got lost in the 7th chapter.
I tried to justify giving this more stars, but i can't bring myself to. I will detail on this below.The quality of the writing is very poor, with words that are misstyped and mismatched that ruin the context.Characters don't stay in character and move from one attitude to the next, without any justification for the transition.The dialogues are poorly matched to the atmosphere and toopic, often using formal speech poorly, thus ruining the immersion. There are decent things as well, such as the world building, the theme and relationships, but too many things were copied from Culti online that it does not seem original.Same MC name, Same dragon name, Similar physique, same power system so far. It's just hard to apreciate something unoriginal that seems like a cheap copy.Coming back to the bad points, this novel could use a full rewrite and edit. Too many mistakes to recover by this point.
"Morjana"
I see what you did there.
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Keep updating, i have high hope for this story.
this book is gold and has good potential just wish he can finish it
"Ce livre captivant m'a transporté dans un monde d'aventures inoubliables. L'auteur a su tisser une trame narrative complexe, riche en rebondissements, qui m'a tenu en haleine jusqu'à la dernière page. Les personnages bien développés ajoutent une profondeur émotionnelle à l'histoire, et la plume de l'écrivain est à la fois poétique et immersive. Une lecture incontournable pour les amateurs de fiction qui recherchent à la fois de l'action et des réflexions profondes."
Amazing.I don't know how much research you have to do to write some of these chapters but I think it's a lot, thank you for it.This novel might seem mundane and boring but it's just the daily life of a person that was born with a difficult to use system and for some reason I find that notion very appealing.Thanks for the novel, keep up the good work.
Hello dear visitor!First of all, let me say thank you for even giving me the chance and clicking on this little story of mine. I’m gonna be honest, this is my second story, and it wasn’t born in the greatest of circumstances. Without wanting to bore you much with the details, I got sick at the beginning of 2021 and spent more than a month in hospital. I felt miserable, thinking that ‘this would be it, this is how my story ends.’ Luckily, I managed to get better and eventually return home. However, during that short period of depression, I sketched up the outline of this story. I loved superhero comics and stories, and I always had this idea to one day make one with my own ideas. Prime Evolver System is the culmination of these desires and wishes. While I am trying to make something unique and original and not follow the same script of “Everyone has superpowers due to an invasion of some interdimensional/alien hostile race and after a long and arduous battle there was a temporary ceasefire approach.”Anyway, I’m not trying to name and shame here, just wanted to try to convey that what I decided to do here may not be the already trusted, generic approach, but instead, a unique and unexplored new path. My path. Our path.Okay, enough of my love letter. :)---STORY: Although I do not want to spoil anything about it, the main character will a small orphaned little boy called Lucien Shaw. Due to… khm, special circumstances revolving around his birth, he has a pretty rough childhood, ultimately ending in a secret government facility where he spends the latter stages of his youth living the life of an experimental test subject.He spends 5 years here until eventually something inside him snaps when they finally go too far and sever his right arm…CHARACTERS: There’s a wide range of cast that I have meticulously flashed out. Each of them has its own personalities, own goals, and desires. Even if it seems like someone at first glance seems boring and 1 dimensional, trust me when I say, there may be more under the hood. ;)WRITING QUALITY: Ehrm… I know I have an ongoing problem, that I am working my hardest to fix. If you spot an occasional typo or a mistake, don’t be afraid to point it out to me. I will try my best to fix them even if there are 300 or so chapters completed already!STABILITY OF UPDATES: This is the one that most are usually interested in. :) Just like with my other novel (The Last Primal) I am planning to write 7 chapters between 1500-1700 words each and every day. If something happens to me and makes me unable to fulfill this mission of mine, I will make sure to let you all know.WORLD BACKGROUND: Whilst a good chunk of the story will be played in the modern, urban society that we all know, I can’t wait to show you my version of the apocalypse! Not gonna lie, I am a great fan of the theme, and always wished to write a story about it! :D---In case you have any questions, don’t hesitate to let me know. Like usually, I always do my best to answer every question.
i really love the novel, i only wish i didnt have to wait so long for more. that may be selfish and im sorry but thats just how i am. love the novel cant wait for more.
Hi I am the author of this book and yes I am giving a 5 star to my book because this will be an interesting book to read. I assure you of that. If you also like my books kindly put it in your collection because I will make sure you will love every chapter of it.And if you want to support my book , YOu can also give a power stone..?Thank You in Advance ?
Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
I love how the main character change this book has a whole unique twist and the layout is well prepared the princess,how they knew who Joshua was ?