I don’t have much to say at the moment. Will be updating this at chapter 50. It is quite a nice novel this far. It could use someone peer reading and helping fix minor mistakes, but otherwise its got potential. A major recommendation is to put a ranking system. Though this might not work depending on how the systems align across planets. If you do put recommend a spoiler at the top of said info page.:)
What a fun story! Ron is such a fun character that I always find myself laughing whenever I read a new update. I just wish the updates can come faster.
Shameless author here giving myself 5 stars (Lets be honest, who would give themselves less than 5 stars unless idk)Anyways, here's my analysis of my very first novel;Grammar, punctuation, and use of clever language I would say is my forte. (Please do point out any mistakes if you see then though)I would say the first 60 chapters or so could have been better and used a bit more polishing. However this is my first novel (Please don't kill me)Also, I'm dumb, so leave more reviews cuz I read all of them. (I do wish to improve my writing skills)
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This story shows anchhi as unconditionally unconditional kind hearted ❤ and I hope next chapters would be more interesting
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The prompt is MC is living in a "digitized world" as said in the synopsis where a portion of the people get a mark on their hand after graduation I guess that allows them to access the system which shows their stats and allows them to cultivate, enter secret realms and pretty much do everything related to cultivation. There is the mortal world where everyone can enter, and when people with the mark die they get 1 more chance to live a mortal life there. In addition to that, there are secret realms from which people get resources from that can only be accessed by people in a certain cultivation realm. MC basically gets a bunch of OP stuff once he breaks through, daily, weekly, monthly, and pretty much like a Gacha game, I guess.On to the actual review. The only somewhat interesting thing here is the setting with the whole digitized thing. Story development is awful IMO mainly because MC doesn't actually have any goal or anything, he just roams around and he claims he wants to max out every realm but he doesn't really do that or again, puts any effort into anything at all. So MC goes with the flow, Character design is pretty garbage but I can't say I expect anything in this category these days. Shouting skill names before using them is cringe, a lot of inconsistencies with the values. What's the point of having accurate attributes like 5000 strength and the likes when even if MC has strength at the peak of a realm he apparently still has to waste time on someone that's just about the breakthrough the early stage? The answer is there is no point and it's just stalling on minor enemies. There are just so many inconsistencies, in general, it really seems like a sketch. Like that time he said it's extremely rare or close to impossible for someone to break through to the 3rd realm in 100 days but this random girl/ MC's previous best friend (?) has this crazy talent and did it in less than a month. I really see no future for this - It doesn't matter how many treasures you throw at this MC but he can't do anything without the right goal or motivation. TL: DR - MC has no goal, tons of inconsistencies, and all in all everything just feels super scuffed. Wouldn't recommend it.
An overall good read. The MC is not a typical overachiever hero or sociopath killing machine, he just doesnt care about anything. He is like in a constant state of depression. Character build up is good. And please everyone don't just assume how the story will go. There is aa girl in love with the mc and everybody in the comments seem sure that it will end up all lovey dovey couple and break the MCs uncaring character. Spoiler: IT DOES NOT. Trust the author a little bit.
Overall the story is pretty generic but not necessarily bad. It's really the characters that are bad.The MC is supposed to have some sort of pro gamer background but from the start he never acts like that. Somehow he gets instantly dumb then gets a stereotypical snarky Fairy who is supposed to be a guide. The two of them combined are too annoying to continue reading.
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The author have the good descriptive of words, reading this remind me of my brother that likes to stream. Game streamers would relate to this. If you are into video games, give this a try!
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Honestly, it's... kinda bad. Plot conveniences everywhere. The MC has apparently been able to fuse his "descriptors" for a while, but he NEVER tries to do so until the beginning of the novel? He uses it once, then seemingly forgets about it, never mind any of his other descriptors that might also benefit from fusion. The only reason the plot moves forwards at all is because the author draped a bunch of faceslapping antagonists and bizarre system mechanics over the plot.