I'm hooked on this fantasy adventure! The world is both enchanting and mysterious, and the characters have me invested in their stories. The promise of more magic and thrilling quests is incredibly exciting.
Can i please get the raw?!? My butt is itching to read this novel! This is a new change of pace! A new Protagonist that controls everything behind the scenes in the shadows!
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The "Dragon Kingdom" and "Free Kingdom" have me really intrigued. We know in lazy writing like this what they 'represent' lol. MC seems to be have a English name too so lets see how that works!
Serously a brainless story. The author doesn't know anything they're writing about.Main character is apparently from the "slums" when he lives on an island city in the United States. Really? Literally the most expensive places to live around the world are on coasts and islands.The author also constantly pushes elitist ideals when describing the entire human race. They're constantly saying things like, "Someone from the slums has no intelligence" and treat him like an animal because of his social status when that literally makes no sense. A story is bound to fail when literally every chapter is an insult to the reader, their culture, their country, or their way of life.
I've never seen a more pointless virtual reality novel in my life. The protagonist dies in the pseudo-game world (which of course merges with the real world like any other virtual reality novel). He then reincarnates to the very first day of the VR game's opening...only to find out his character is already min-maxed. There's absolutely nothing he can do to to make himself better. So now there's no point in grinding for power (which is what's fun about this genre). So this MC just pretends to be a 'noob' and walks around the world displaying a fraction of his power every now and again. Of course there will be a party of players who witness and react to this in amazement. This is disappointing.
Is it wrong for me to state facts? The fact I'm stating is that this novel is good. Really good , I'm not lying , slap me headless until thunder strikes , this novel is a good read.
looks promising, so many plot ideas can write about this.. well lets see in the future.. ill be back lets bookmark it for now[img=recommend][img=recommend]
@Author,Can you add plz a TAG for Ga#y or Trap, it's not for everyone this kind of stuff.Or a at least, explain Clearly the situation in the synopsis.Thanks in advance for your understanding.
I originally started this story just because I saw the word "Harem" in its name but this quickly grew into one of my favorite stories. Even if you don't like Harem I really suggest giving it a chance you may or may not enjoy it regardless. So if you are reading this review I will only say this, Go and read the free chapters at a minimum right now! My reasons? It made me experience a roller-coaster of emotions multiple times, I even had to stop reading for a little emotional break near the end, then BlackFlamer-sama hit me with another emotional truck-kun when the story ended. Now why are you still here? Go read! Shoo shoo. Begone! start reading already. And for you BlackFlamer-Sama, hopefully wn doesn't delete this as well, refer to the gif!
A great novel, I have no idea why it hasn't been contracted yet, but, it's still a great novel anyways.1. Writing quality is a lot better than most books on the platform, with there being only 4-5 writing mistakes every chapter. Also, for some reason, I don't know if it's just me, but I feel like the author uses the word "sneer" in the wrong context, and it just makes the story sound super weird at some points. Other than that, there's just a normal amount of errors per chapter that don't really take away from the story.2. The stability of updates is kinda weird with really sporadic updates, don't know what that's about, but yeah it's pretty inconsistent.3. The story development is pretty average right now, not a pacing that would make your heart race, but not a totally bad pacing either. It's a pretty average speed that's neither really good or bad.4. The character design is, again, like the story development, pretty average, with characters that are pretty well thought out. I just felt that some character traits were forced into certain parts of the story, making it a little weird.5. Now, this world background is outstanding. As of where I am right now, chapter 21, it's totally thought out in its fullest and just seems really intricate. It's really amazing, and I have no critiques on it.Overall, a good novel, and it's free. I mean, for some reason, a lot of the free novels are just a lot better than most contracted novels. Anyways, good job author!
Let me be honest with this story the 1st 30 chapter is a very tough on the reading as a lot of grammatical sentence continuity and spelling mistakes. With chapters being short for the 1st 50 or so on top of the generic plot/character progression. I would hold off until the writer gets an editor to proof read his current chapters and go back through and edit the existing ones because their are sentences that don't make sense.