love ur work!!! very excited to read more
I love this novel so much, please keep the hard work dear author ,I would like to see how the relationship between these two develop ….?❤️❤️❤️????????
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Just another reincarnation story, so if you have good ideas, suggestions or just complains let me know. I think this story could become something great...Feel free to write some comments and reviews!And don´t forget to stay healthy!
my fellpw brothers....if you like the "cultured genre this novel is for you. 10/10 absolutely love the scenes so far keep it up author!
Well it's definitely the author's first work, I can tell. I do applaud you wholeheartedly for actually sticking to the story and actually following an upload schedule.Well with that out of the way, I would like to offer some suggestions. The grammar itself isn't the worst. Obviously there are mistakes here and there (mainly about punctuation and sentence structure) but that's about the average quality you can find on webnovel so I wouldn't fault you. You are writing in first person POV which is really good for a character driven writing style, but the problem is that you need to include more descriptive language into your writing to make us engaged with the story as well as adhering to 'show don't tell' thing. You see, humans have 5 senses, but you only describe what the mc sees and exclude hearing and smelling completely which otherwise could have helped in making your world feel alive (here you can also use metaphors and comparisons like many authors do). You should also include more internal monologues so that at the very least make him somewhat entertaining to read, as well as slow down the pace a bit to make actions feel natural.
good story, it's just very annoying that the MC is referred to as Qin Tian all the time even though he should actually be Oscar, especially when everyone else has German names or when others address him as Oscar. That seems to alienate the MC from the story.Can it maybe be changed?
Story is really good, just feels like bad translation.Characters are interestingCan i get raw name pls?----------------------------------
I don’t usually like school setting but this story was quite interesting. Enjoyed every minute of it.
Waiting for more chapters. keep it up ??
There aren't many system GLs out there, and even fewer in the ABO world. That's why when I find a romance this good with these elements, I absolutely fall in love with it! And I'm really enjoying following your story—it's truly amazing.
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