Read the first few chapters, and the story really tugs at one’s heartstrings with that the FL goes through. Thumbs up to the author and hope the compelling storyline continues !
Plot line does make you feel curious. Only came after reading reviews. Glad did so. It'snice and interesting. World background is nice as well.
Amazing work author, keep up the good work. Though I'll plead for a little character development, anyway you did well, keep on updating, you are good
The novel is good so far. I've read all the free chapters at this time. Does anyone know the raw for this novel? It would be greatly appreciated
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The premise itself is good, and the characters in MC's new world are interesting, especial So Won. If it's going to become *cough cough* BL *cough cough cough* I'd eagerly be following along. It's fine if it's not, though, I could just silently ship the characters from the safety of my couch ^0^I read past chapter 3, and though there were still some tricky parts, the writing becomes much better from there. I strongly recommend for any author to use Grammarly before publishing (and no, I'm not getting paid to endorse it this damn much). I have it installed in Chrome, it's my last line of defense before releasing a chapter. Here, there were still minor errors in the first two chapters that I didn't address because I'm pretty sure the free version of Grammarly would catch them just fine. That said, author, please take this as a gesture of goodwill because I saw in the forums how worried you were--Chapter 1:lion and his songs that--> and WITH his songs thatthe 75,000 seats in the stadium were full--> were FILLED (to capacity).Kim Chun Ha appeared on stage--> make it "onstage" -- no spacea 19-year-old boy with black hair and green eyes of 179cm entered -- like this, it sounds like it's his eyes that's 179cm, so...--> a 19-year-old boy OF 179cm, with black...they needed to take a sleep--> EITHER needed to sleep OR needed to take a napJae Hyun decided to tell HER--> tell HIM In fact, I have already informed...--> you forgot to add the opening quotation mark "In fact...Do you even know dance? And just saying but when you agreed to give me your voice--> Do you even know how to dance (not sure if this is what you meant, but "know dance" doesn't sound right)--> make the next statement stronger by simply starting with "When you agreed to give..."--> delete "and just saying"He ignored what he had just told him before look at him and talk.--> (Jae Hyun) ignored Chun Ha's words (I'd suggest naming at least one of the characters in a sentence if they have the same gender; it's to avoid confusion about who's doing what)--> and simply looked at him before speaking.Kim Chun Ha's anger lashed his mind and blew up.--> I don't understand what you mean by "lashed his mind." Maybe it's best if you just say (his) anger blew up.I make you regret being born--> I'LL make you...a shot was heard--> a shot sounded OR rang out (to avoid the passive "was heard")Once he would be cured--> Once HE'S curedJae Hyun had a pinch in his heart--> Jae Hyun's heart constrictedChapter 2:He tried to sit down,--> sit UPhis body gave up to him--> up ON himhis agency—if you say so—saved--> did you mean "if you could call them that"?Fake to sleep? Hid?--> Fake sleep--> HideThink to something--> Think OF somethingand the panic gradually spread to him--> and his panic gradually spread (could use a different word here imo).He was going to tell them their home truths!--> "home truths" seems to be an idiomatic expression in French? Not sure, but it doesn't translate well, I would suggest a more common phrase like "tell them what's what"Sorry I didn't force you.--> Sorry, I shouldn't have forced you/pushed you too hard"Am I still dreaming?
I love how greek mythology is incorporated into the story. Greek mythology in itself is already a great piece of art, so I like how the author blends his idea with it. I've seen some grammatical errors here and there, but we all make mistakes so that's not that big of an issue. Keep the good work up author!
Why didn't this book appear in my recommendations before???? This is seriously one of the best system based books I've read. The MC, I just somehow find him so amusing and as well as his interactions with his own "system". The synopsis is perfect! And the prologue did an incredible job at the world building. Only reading a few chapters is enough for the reader to know it's going to get better with every chapter. I'm getting immersed here, especially since there's no grammar or formatting problems as wellKeep going, author!!!
The story is so good and promising-looking for more to come and the plot is really interesting and I can't wait for the new chapter thank you
I wanted to ask does the main character have a last name because I don’t think I’ve seen any Remnant of it? but overall I honestly love
This is a good interesting little story. Sorry Kyosea, but my three spirit stones are already committed to be split 2/1 amongst two other stories and while you've got something good, it isn't good enough to displace either of my favorites…I must say though, I very much liked the idea that some ordinary dude got an invite to a magician's chat group purely by accident…And you kinda blew that almost immediately by having your "MC" be the "Destined One" with beaucoup backstory.EE…One other thing, there has already been one case of "let's memory-wipe the mundane so they don't find out the truth…"So far as I am concerned, tampering with someone's memory is a FAR MORE REPREHENSIBLE CRIME than simply killing them.Faced with a choice—and none of these folks get a choice—"let us erase the most significant experience of your life OR we'll have to kill you…"I'd unhesitantly chose death.Altering someone's memories is a form of mental rape—and the Victorians quite properly named rape "A fate worse than death."
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