Clarissa felt an inner urge to speak, motivating her own lips without her power
This Novel needs some serious re writing. It is a classic example of someone writing a story synopsis to match a writing competition and still trying to make the synopsis/MC backstory seem relatable and exciting, only to then realize that it was a load of trash and will cripple the progress of their story as they don't know how to properly integrate the components. The author thus has a very thick face, makes many, many contradictory statements and events. MC winds up unrelatable and unrealistic considering his past. Case in point, the back story of the MC does not line up with his actions, he should have barely read anything in that huge library because a) it was huge, B) he was fighting for his life and recources all the time, c) he was a young man. He had neither the time nor mental acuity to digest the library's contents. In the authors own words the MC was average. Other than the bare necessity of Mana cultivation knowledge he should know nothing about alchemy, because a) in his original time there were next to no alchemy resources and thus no need to waste time on 'useless learning' , B) he would have little to no time to practice and experiment, which as even the author states, is absolutely necessary.In short this story is pushed ahead by its release date and general lack of glaring spelling and Grammer errors, thanks to some decent editors. Unfortunately they as well fail in the prime editing directive, which is to do more than just correct spelling and Grammer. A piece of software can do that much, they fail to correct the terrible inconsistencies found in this novel. This novel is a symptom of the worst of webnovel's glamour. And yet simply changing the MC from a 20 year old youth when he died to a 100-200 year old veteran wizard who had the time to absorb decent amounts of misc knowledge from the library turns the whole paradigm on its head. Will it require a lot of rewriting, yes. But it needs to happen nonetheless. In short, if the author want his novel to be anything more than a trashy joke then they need to seriously consider the overall novel balance and scope, otherwise this novel will slowly throttle itself to death in a mire of tangled and increasingly convoluted and contrived plots.
'Was not planning on it. If it is hidden from them let us keep it that way.' Looking back to Riku I noticed she had a more genuine smile on. "So are you feeling better now?"
tI could hear cries, sobs and wailings. Whether they were genuine or not, it still made my heart warm knowing that at least, many cares for me, either this feeling was true or not.
She turned to look at the professor but not before I saw a guilty glance towards me in her eyes.
"Ah..It's okay...stop crying."
This is a story that the author spent months researching. Set in the Victorian era, the author strives to make it an epic masterpiece. Actual factual tidbits from the real world are weaved into this steampunk world.There is rich world building with characters and their personalities fleshed out perfectly. However... Maybe it's best not to get too tied to the characters...The development of the mystical elements are very well planned, with 220 classes. Imagine the richness that will bring!Many things are foreshadowed in this story, so look out for that!As translator, I will try to make sure the release rates are high.
She narrowed her eyes and continued at her normal pace, a smirk appeared as she went down a dark and obsolete path, away from the sounds of grander celebration.
Everywan I'm think of writing a novel after the invisible dragon^^
Gotta touch 'em all, Beast Masters! This is what I gathered from the free chapters. The MC somehow ends up as Bai Qi, a Mechanical Engineer student, with an Evolution Egg as his isekai perk. What does it do? He was clueless until he figured out what triggered it. What triggers it? Again, gotta touch 'em all! I just feel so bad for the poor Husky though T-T Maybe I'll find out what happens to it later down the line when I decide to open up more chapters.
really enjoying story so far, keep it up!
This story is a true gem. The grammar and writing style are impeccable, making for a smooth and enjoyable read. The world-building—it's absolutely mind-blowing. The game elements are amazing. I found myself completely immersed. This story sets the bar high for fantasy storytelling.