Is the MC stupid or what? My god, it seems far-fetched that he's dumb. 200 caps and he didn't understand anything about the game and the real world
I need raw... does somebody have raw?..............................................................................................................
After reading the rawThe novel is okjust turn ur brain offhad the LoHP vibe (plot always saved him)A bit on nationalism **spoilerMC learned English and people(american) try to talk to him but he was like they should talk to him in Chinese (even though they don’t know how to speak It)Had money and now he can cheat on his lovers without letting them know first guess what ?? plot saved him again and let the lovers think that they aren’t good enough for himWell it a wish fulfillment What did I expect ??
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Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
You have a great idea for the story! I like the mixture of time travel, reincarnation, and all the science-fiction aspects of your story.The plot is intriguing and your characters are nicely created.The thing that bothers me is the way you construct dialogues, it shows the imperfection of the author's workshop, so there is a place for improvement.
is decent and has potential but it hasnt been updated in forever.............................................................................
honestly it's pretty terrible because the story background changes to much. for example in the 1 or 2 chapter the mc had parents but then in the next chapter the mc parent had died and suddenly had a sister. also I feel like it drags out a scene to long. but other than that it's a good concept just needs to go back to the drawing board .
I love the way this novel goes.. it's pretty decent has a unique vibe.. y'all gata try reading this. I can guarantee y'all that you won't get disappointed
I like friendship stories, but this work is at the next level! I like how the author draws the background world so neatly and i like the Japanese culture in the very beginning chapters. The action and the thrill make it even more challenging to read! just some input from me.. i think the author may watch the punctuation and the space between one to another person dialogue so it would be neater. But for the rest of that is good! Nice story to read!
Just a honest opinion. Story Development is bad. There is not much exciting story to it and it's very confusing. Characters just pops up with little to no introduction to them. It make excited what going to come and happen in the chapter and new characters would just add more things me to get confused about. How about when introducing a new god, give us a brief description of him/her appearance/behavior as well as his domain e.g is he/she a god of fire, god of water, etc.
although it's a very small thing. Could've started with a better ranking system instead of just doing 2/12, 3/12, 4/12, so on and so forth... it looks too plain.. ?
This desperately needs an editor and someone who understands chinese'isms. The english seems to be a word for word literal translation making it very difficult to understand what is happening.