Great backstory let's see!!! The power system too unique I think..I have read my own shares of novels especially those of system genre so since the backdrop looks cool hope for more dramatic and character involved story instead of cliche arrogant mc slapping everyone flaunting his hierarchy...do a good job..good luck
Hi guys Ivory here Kinda shameless of me to write a review on my own novel but i just wanted to drop in and say hi :) also a little more back story on our main character Kalida his name is acctually a reference to the word Calida in spanish which means hot and khalida which translates to deathless or immortal in latin. Our protag personality is a slum dwelling deviant who is both cunning and funny at times, due to that he learnt to do anything to survive in this huge industrial city. Anyway thats enough from me if you guys enjoyed the first chapter drop a like and subscribeto the novel?
i am shameless can't lie, love my story but there is an issue i struggle with, pacing. but hey, we all start some where right, i will keep improving my skills as time goes on.
Interesting. The Female lead has strong motivations for survival .This novel appears like it is the beginning of a long adventure.
based on the free chapters I read it it is a good novel
Beautiful content.Characters are very interesting.Ricol, a unique character and Jake and John are good characters. Very nice story. Agirl with super power. A loveable character.
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Hoping the romantic relationship takes off soon!!
Brainrot ahh zaimond??, I need more chapters... Chapter 3, Please!I'm totally hooked on Aluts World: This Journey. The plot is like a rollercoaster, the characters are fire, and the world-building is epic. I'm dying to know what happens next!Caelan, Elden, and Zaimond are the ultimate squad goals. Their chemistry is off the charts, and their adventures are so much fun to follow. The action is intense, the magic is mind-blowing, and the humor is spot-on.I'm especially loving the way the author is building the world. The lore is rich and detailed, and the mysteries are super intriguing. I can't wait to learn more about the Demon Kings and the disappearance of the legendary knights.Basically, I need Chapter 3 ASAP. I'm so invested in this story, and I can't get enough!
kind of good ngl. Imma stack up on chapters and come back to this
The MC is not edge lord and thank god it is not a system novel. Book is good. Atleast Give it a try before passing judgement. My first issue is pacing. The pacing is too fast paced and stabilized somewhere around 50 chapters. Hope author continues it that way otherwise it feels like watching a YouTube video on 4x speed. Second issue is main characters are training day in and day out. There is not enough break. From readers POV it would too overwhelming as they are productive every chapter posted. To offside it, show how MC and similar are interacting like going outside doing something entertaining etc. it kinda takes readers mind off but the transition should be organic. MC is becoming too OP too fast. Even without system cheats MC is becoming OP too fast. Better make the MC settle for sometime and make readers adjusted. Naruto is a story which takes more chapters to fully explore. So it is best if author takes it slow and explores more. Author specific:- If you are serious about writing this fic, Try to look in reddit sub threads for novels with high intense fight narration. It might help writing more flushed out fight scenes. Fight scenes are the bread and butter of Naruto fic. The story premise would be same for all the thousands of fics but if you want your fic to stand out you need to bring in more to the table. Overall it is 4 out of 5. Let me know about the criticism author if you have read the review.