The character is a cunning vicious and a cold and composed character. What you like to see, and he isn’t the type to rush things but also has a firm hold on people’s heart, establishing his authority from the start. Recommend to read!
My favorite of her books so far looking forward to more updates. I’ve added to my library. Add it to yours. ??
1.Slow pace needs time-skips.2.The MC is still a 5-year-old after almost 100 chapters.3.Too many unnecessary fillers.4.Excessive focus on background characters.I enjoyed the first 20 to 30 chapters, thinking it was just setting up the story and anticipating a time skip. But oh boy, was I wrong. We're 100 chapters in, and there’s still a ton of unnecessary filler. This novel seems more focused on background characters than the main character.For example, there are 50 to 70 chapters of random mining for mana stones—completely unnecessary. This could have been handled earlier in the story or skipped altogether. Instead, we get a drawn-out sequence that feels like it’s there just to pad the novel. And the whole "killing people with snakes" arc feels like a convoluted way to stretch the story without adding meaningful progression.Even worse, after 100 chapters, the protagonist is still a 5-year-old acting like a full-grown adult. I get that this is a fantasy story, but even fantasy needs some realism. It’s becoming boring. You could skip 10 to 30 chapters and still feel like you haven’t missed anything—that’s how painfully slow the story is.The writing itself is solid, but the pacing and unnecessary padding make this novel feel disappointing. It could really benefit from a rewrite or a significant cut to its length.
Enjoyable story with good characters and an interesting setting the Dungeon building aspect is honestly my favorite part my only complaint on that is how short those parts actually are id like to see a better balance between the adventure and dungeon building, other than that my only complaint is the short amount of chapters uploaded id like to see more. Overall I do believe this novel is worth supporting and am eager to see where it goes.
I'll be shameless enough to write my own review regarding the second book that I have created. I think my writing is more suited into stories like this one rather than straight-up fantasies since power scaling is quite hard to do. I've done well in writing the chapters so far and focusing it on the overpowered female lead brings up a fresh air rather than have all males dominate the scenes.
The story is fantastic. I only wish that the pace was a bit slower in some sections. but the level of detail and description in the majority of the story is amazing. thank you for crafting such a masterpiece.
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Hello everyone, my name is Rin. To be honest, I've never attempted to write a novel or even a short story. I'm more of an avid reader—one might say obsessed! Since graduating and without work or studies, I spend over nine hours a day immersed in novels, sometimes even more. However, lately, I haven't found any books that truly capture my interest. I read a few chapters and then lose my passion for the story.Having not found anything to read for a week and feeling unproductive, I thought, why not try writing one myself? Since I lack experience, I aimed to write at least one chapter. As I don’t have any friends, I’d like to ask anyone who might read this chapter: do I have any talent? Should I continue, or should I just give up?"
Hey there!I just finished reading your story, and I’m completely blown away! Your writing is so captivating, and I couldn’t help but picture how amazing it would look as a comic.I’m a professional commissioned artist, and I’d be super excited to bring your story to life in comic form. no pressure, though! I just think it would be a perfect fit.If you’re interested, hit me up on Instagram (@lizziedoesitall) or Discord (lizziedoesitall). Let me know what you think!Cheers,Lizzie
I'm addicted to this story, i really like and appreciate your effort, the writing quality is also amazing ?
It is really good story. Storytelling is ggoodThe chpts are i hope uploaded more at a time instead of only 3-4 that are uploaded every alternate day
It's full of action and you're always guessing what's gonna happen next and it always surprises you! ?