you have a decent start here i truly enjoy the way hes a happy person with dark magic
I’m doing it again so other can read it
Hello, there, author. As promised, I'll give you brutally honest review.
As I've said in the other day, you need to fix how you write the dialogue but I see no improvement.
I mean, why you do you use "<" and ">" to separate the dialogues and paragraphs instead of ("Blas bla, bla.).
Your story is good, but ruined by your ignorance to learn the proper writing techniques.
good luck.
I really love your story but I wonder why you stopped updating. Who offended you?
the author doesn't know how to portray the character and is very naive.
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This is a very good novel, the story is really addictive and the plot is well described. It's easy to imagine the scenes. I highly recommend it
So there aren't that much chapter yet but What I read it is amazing! I really love the plotline and hope that it continuous the in upcoming chapter .It's definitely worth reading.
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I like the concept of the story. And it has potential. But when the 'damsel in distress' scenario happens in chapter 4 itself, it's so disappointing. And the way the MC speaks to other women just irks me.What I'm saying is, HAREM is fine. But it should be done tastefully otherwise just don't do it. When you bring a woman this soon into the story, it just ruins the future plot.Another novel with potential got ruined.
Waste of time, MC is cowardly, selfish, pathetic and hateful. Why anyone would think people would want to read about a PoS MC like that is incomprehensible.
I only got through eight chapters.The novel is far too ridiculous for my tastes. Some reviews have labeled the MC as stupid, but I feel he is not serious or even real. His behaviors and reactions resemble those of a player (PC) in an artificial environment populated with non-player characters (NPCs).While it was great in the beginning for him to fulfill the prior body's owner's task (even if he did it out of greed, not to retain his scholarly image of not breaking commitments), he immediately moved to sell his books.There is no exploring the world, nor is there any exploring of cultivation goods prices. He has no proof that his manuals work. After all, system novels that troll hosts are now popular. He simply acquired a vendor spot and plopped down... And the author wonders why everyone calls MC stupid. Also, when MC needs someone to use this cultivation manual, he goes to get a loli in the typical Chinese pedo way. Later, he finds a whole orphanage with children/lolis/shotas. MC is also a typical snob. He despises those who look down on him while looking down on everyone else. [He waved at the servant impatiently as if swatting a fly. He didn't even bother to turn around and face Li Chun.][Meanwhile, Ikasa turned back to the booklets and thought, "Mere dog barking for his master." Ptui.][Hehehe, that felt good. Serves you right for looking down on a Scholar!]MC is an unlikable person. While humor is subjective, this novel tries to squeeze laughs out of stupid situations and 'let's kick a dead horse 1000 times'. I don't even want to know how many more times situations involving the book's stupid names being the joke: "Ah, stupid-sounding name," at which point NPCs will become enraged at 'poor' MC.It wasn't funny the first time, and it wasn't funny the tenth time either.I suggest this book to everyone who has a goldfish memory. You've been a happy goldfish your entire life because you can't remember hearing the same joke 1000th times.