I love the concept of the story and the characters themselves. There are a few very minor spelling errors but significantly better than most stories on the platform. My main concern is that his stat sheet is repeated almost every single chapter, and considering that nothing changes really in the later chapters (50-75ish, which is latest released at this time), other than the number of lottery tickets, it would really help with immersion to just show the parts of the status that actually changed. There have even been chapters with the entire long status listed more than once in the chapter, leaving significantly less of the chapter to be the actual story and it feeling a bit like a cash grab tbh. Other than that, I just hope the author sticks with the story, as it does have great potential and has been a very enjoyable read.
great writing, impressive efficiency, just not for me. It’s an amalgamation of existing tropes.
A Really nice story. The author did justice to the characters. If you love this book I recommend you also read “The Silver Bullet” by SAINt ZEMA.
A unique story line and great character design. the development of how the story goes kept getting better and better. recommend ? . great job author ?
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Mc has no motive to do anything, making it hard to invest in the story or conflict. Mc would rather be sleeping. systems with personalities are double-edged swords. If done right, it can enhance if wrong it can hurt,but the system can't be the only driving force of the Mc growth.
Hey everyoneI really recommend this story because this story is so good and when you read this story, the story will bring you to the imagination world so that make me can’t wait to read for the next episode. Oh by the way The author is my friend and he is talented to make a story so it would be better for you guys to follow him right now and don’t forget to give him a vote by power stone.Thanks guys have fun?
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Good book and the writing quality good but still there are a few mistakes ? correct them ..................................................