hmmmm how to say it prob a first time writter the plot is progressing fast like abnormaly fast. Sometimes is confusing and very anoying but i guess you have to sart somwhere it would an ok thing to edit it if it get popular
So obviously a of negative comments, but the story isn't bad overall. It has good progression but author could explain some things a little better. Biggest downfall, is in the later chapters author just reuses/rewords the same action the MC/other characters do. Still ongoing and from what I've seen on other sites, it's pretty much the same thing. So not sure if author is having a hard time creating material or if it's just so that they can reach minimum words for each chapter. Honestly that's the biggest headache, reading the same thing 3-4 times throughout the chapter and in the end they've only done like 3 actual things throughout it. If it's a creativity issue then my recommendation is to just slow down on number of chapters per week. If it's cause they wanna be lazy and just use the excess as a filler to complete the chapter, then the readers that have made it to the later chapters will likely stop reading as well. Anyway, hope that bit gets changed but other than that I like the story so far
I have read most of the novel but iam done I guess bcz I can't bear a for ed romance at all he first met Alice and they became rival and teammates for the quest and that was all good and I was really liking that idea but then she suddenly disappeared for no apparent reason and then there then introduce cloe and that seems really forced and she even forced him to date her and I really don't like her as a fml bcz that seems to forced I don't know why author have to do something so stupid when he/she was writing the story of shin and Alice so well but I guess that's their choice so Sayonara
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Hello, guys, your dear author is here, I just wanted to say that my English is not good because English is not my first language, but I am trying very hard to improve myself, please keep loving and keep supporting my work.
What thing that amazed me in this story is the mysterious resurrection of the Deputy. I'm a fan of power system and this story is more than power system
Tbh, I've only read until chapter 22 because the MC is bad and waiting for character development for 39 chapters isn't worth the read. Author could've made the character development in a much shorter time frame than having to wait almost 40 chaps, I GUARANTEE that most of your readers have dropped the story because of how long the character development is.The writing quality is amazing since you can really understand the story well and the Grammer mistakes are next to none. The story can be slow at some points but it fleshes out the side characters well.All in all the story is great I love it but the MC is really off putting and some readers can't handle that, including me. If you can handle waiting for a character development then try this story out, it's good. If you can't then don't waste your time reading this.
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Concept of the story is amazing, the fact The MC is a hybrid got my attention, the story flow is smooth and understandable, embedding so mysteries and of course RomanceI recommend it for others to try out♥️♥️♥️
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I cannot even get through chapter 2. It has some of the better grammer I’ve seen, but the writing is childrens book level. “See spot run. See spot eat out of the dog bowl. See spot go to Petco”
Great work! This is a masterpiece, I can actually imagine myself in the life of the characters. It is really amazing. Continue uploading with the chapters.