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In all honesty, it's a good idea but poorly executed. The world building is nice, and the character designs were pretty good. But the powers are just confusing as hell, and that part feels massively rushed. Obviously a character gets stronger as time goes on, but i feel like the whole Ashura thing got revealed way too early and the different "systems" (shadows, chaos, darkness, the eye, forgemastering, the new body,...) were put way too close togheter, which makes it a confusing mess. Give the readers time to digest the powers and how they work because releasing them so close to one another just makes it confusing. The worldbuilding is great, though, and im a pretty big fan of how the politics work. But the power system needs work.
"Dear darling readers, Author here.As you indulge in the tantalizing tale of Suzy and Ryan, I implore you to savor every moment, every twist, and every turn. For in the world of romance and mystery, one must always expect the unexpected.And, of course, I must insist that you share your thoughts and opinions on this delightful story. Leave your reviews and comments, darling readers, and let the author know that their efforts have not gone unnoticed.For in the words of yours truly, Cameron Rose, "A good story is like a good gossip - it must be shared and savored by all."Yours truly,Cameron Rose"
This is what you should expect.... It's a new breath of fresh air compared to some of the other novels here. It will start off real casual and friendly. You'll smile and think "cute!" and stuff. Then we're going to progress and things will take a turn. You'll know it when it comes . Things are going to get real seinen around here. So go into this remembering one thing....... "It's a cultivator novel". Cultivator culture involves crazy sociopathic opportunists who get jacked on pills and the only way to the top and becoming an Immortal is over a mountain of dead bodies of your enemies and friends because well, there isn't enough resources for everyone.
I'm loving the mental games going on between the different characters. Kind of reminds me of Twelve Angry Men (being stuck in one room and trying to reach a consensus) and Death Parade (random people being forced to play a game with limited memories). Fun to read so far. Just a few grammatical mistakes, but it overall reads well and gets the suspense right. Introducing so many characters can be difficult, but even with just 3 chapters, I have a good feeling about each of them. Looking forward to more and figuring out who the killer is!
This is great! I would totally recommend it! Unfortunately, I wasn't able to read past the locked chapters, but still, great story!:))))))
Thanks for the hard Work ? Thanks for the hard Work ? Thanks for the hard Work ? Thanks for the hard Work ? Thanks for the hard Work ?!
Good job so far with the writing! I think that you are off to a good start as an author and am absolutely looking forward to reading more of your releases!-dff123P.S. Let's be friends on discord ;)
This story could go in brazzillion different ways and it will still be good. , honestly, I'm impressed. The twist and turns alone phew. dont know why he does not update really fast. fix that
Author I found the idea of the story very good and a proposal quite different from what we see even in fantasy books released in bookstores, I liked the visual a little steam punk that is portrayed, but I think it lacks a little experience in writing da pra perceive that you do not have much experience and the chapters are very short , Honestly, if I had read this synopsis of your book in a bookstore I would buy, because it is something very different from what we see today, the characters also found interesting the choice of each oneI kept really imagining such a book as a sequel like percy jackson and others . Simply put you held me very well in the story
I have read many fantasy books but this book is entirely different and the storyline is interesting and it intrigued me to read further...The author's writing style is remarkable...The characters are incredible...Kudos work, Author!
Pick up this book and read it. It's very good. Fair grammar, some mistakes but understandable. I really like the MC. He's got a good character. I hope the author doesn't make any crazy tweak on him. Good dialogues. Well done author.