Writing Quality: 4/5Your chapters are well-written, I really enjoyed reading through them due to the detailed descriptions. Your vocabulary is also quite good. I'm reading on my PC so some of the paragraph lengths don't bother me as much. However, you could consider separating a few of your paragraphs (mainly information about the world, an object, or a place) to make them shorter. That way, mobile readers won't be faced with text walls. In regard to grammar and mechanics, I'd recommend editing through your chapters once you've written them. There are one or two spelling mistakes which can be easily corrected.Stability of Updates: 5/5I'm not sure about your schedule for updates, but it's pretty consistent right now.Story Development: 4/5The development of your novel so far is good. You have introduced the protagonist (as well as his background and relationships), then depicted the direction of the novel. You have also hinted at a subplot/complication in the second chapter which may be important in the future, which increases the urge to continue reading. I like the action in the latest chapters, but I'd suggest adding more sensory detail to enhance your writing.Character Design: 4/5Your characters are designed really well. I like how you have weaved in little details that enrich the personalities of your characters. (E.g: Riley making sure to pick the burnt pancakes for himself.) This creates depth in your characters, and also demonstrates the relationship and bond between the siblings ^ - ^ The banter between the brother and sister pair is also very realistic. In regard to other characters, I like how you have incorporated Riley's thoughts about them in your descriptions. Rather than blandly listing their characteristics, you have presented them in a more fluid and natural manner.World Background: 4/5I like your execution of worldbuilding ^ - ^. I generally don't read cyberpunk novels, however, you have written it in a way that's ****** and clear to understand. I've mentioned this before above, but I enjoy how you've connected information regarding the world with Riley's thoughts and comments in your writing. This way, it's more interesting and seems more authentic.I enjoyed reading this, good luck with future chapters ~
This genre is not really my cup of tea but still looks pretty interesting and has quite a potential. Keep up the good work! Y'all should def give it a read if this genre interests you.
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sometimes makes mistakes in the spelling of a word or misses words to form a proper sentence,good story development so far but wish main character had a disguise technique cause it would be convenient now and in the future just in case someone sees him and i wish the main character would slaughter people more,he world background hasn't been that thoroughly explained yet
I personally haven't read it but it seems to just basically be 'Battle Through the Heavens' but instead of it being the originator of cliches, it's just trying to use them all.
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AMAZING !! I just read two chapters and I was in !! The plot is very intriguing and engaging. Really loved the progression of the story !! Keep up the work !I am eagerly waiting for upcoming chapters !!
The writing style is good as well as the character development. The male lead has an air of arragance and haughtiness. I am waiting to see how his character develops in the upcoming chapters. I hope to see an improvement in him.
It is a very good imagination and good character building. You need to work on the sentence formation for the next chapters. You have really improved in the third chapter. Good work keep it going.......
A história parece bastante interessante e tem muito lugar para se desenvolver , espero que todas as gems não sejam homens , e ficarei muito curioso com a interação do MC com as jóias do infinito.
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