A good start, with minimal grammar errors and good prose. This'll go far given enough time. Dialogue flows organically, but you might want to flesh it out a bit more. Describe the character's cadence or subtle mannerisms during dialogue to give it more impact and individuality. Other than that? I'll see what becomes of this after a few more chapters. Keep on writing ?
A great premise building immediate tension in the early chapters with the 3 months. This story explores the mind space of someone with limited time. The use of punctuation and flow of sentences could be improved with time and more practice, but the characters that are integral to stories like this are all built up nicely in the early stages.There may be a sense of over-description at times, though it only provides more details into both the environment and the mental of the main character.Speaking of the main character, the vibrant yet lightly erratic thoughts and conversation with self is something I actually related to way too hard with.....
What the ****? qidian is chasing me, every novel I read and think is good, qidian does not select? **** you old is already the 3 book you can't even vote for, damn it, I hate it.