????????????????????????????.........?????????????????????????????????????????
So.... There's also ***** novels to read now....Cooolllllll..??I totally love that FaceSmacking and OverPowered protagonist....???Its also kinda fun and exciting for that "wife stealing"?? and even the erotic parts...???I liked it... Keeo it up. !!??
Swallowed a candy that fell from a girl's body? Somehow became the dragon king's son in law? The absurdity and ex-machina vibe actually intrigues me.Experiencing a hidden world, I got the fantasy vibes of Harry Potter and Ancient Magus' Bride... Gonna give this a try.
bro, you have a good story. its nice to see a new novelist rise up to shine, i will try to support you by reading and appreciate your worksthe grammar was horrible at early but its getting better and better later on, it's show how hard you work. we are really thankful for that.but you see, the problem is every new reader always start from beginning, and it will really help yourself if you revise you early work. I'm sure it will encourage many new reader.i thank you for your time and effort, i wish you goodluck
I really liked the story, I haven't read many books that had central themes around sports, but I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the direction the story was going and the development with the mc is gradual and natural. The transitions from different povs is used well and it helps complement the story as a whole. There were a few grammar mistakes, but that's easy to fix with a quick reskim. The only problem I found was with some of the ways sentences are structured. For example, whenever the MC's father died I seemed like he was just listing things and how they happened, this kind of detracted from the emotional impact of the story. But this is just a small knit pick that can be easily adjusted, keep up the great work author.
At the moment the he novel is at about a 100 chapters, and I think it's fair to give it a review now. For starters the novel greatly exceeded my expectations. I expected some more lame-ass faceslapping, but for once I got a decent fan-fic. Yes that's right, fan-fiction. Lets be clear, this sure as hell is written by a football fan as fan-fiction, with tons of known players like fabregas, bale and Walcott making guest appearances, alongside some imaginary players. It isn't bad at all, in fact it's fairly decent, the plot goes on nicely, and it has a nice and peaceful atmosphere. It reminds me a lot of those kingdom-building novels, as that really is what it is. We watch Tang En, or Tony Twain, or TT as I like to call him build a football empire. We watch as he picks up to be pro players, and builds some players himself. It's a light entertaining read with some amount of info-dumping and discoursing upon football tactics.Now on to the bad. Yes there are problems. Any and all conversations feel robotic as ****, and really weird. They don't sound like humans, but more like NPC's interacting. There are equally weird filler arcs, where our main character accidentally kidnaps a loli, and barely evades the FBI. Clearly filler. Character development can get weird at times too. In short the writing is fairly terrible. THe characters themselves however, do have personality. That itself is itneresting, though bound by stereotypes the author believes in.
Couldn't get past the first 20 chaps. Found the MC to annoying, I understand low key but this guy was just so cowardly! Low key and cowardly aren't the same think, I would advise author to rewrite the synopsis to highlight cowardly protagonist!
currently at ch 34. below average story. The author tries to portray mc as a thinker and intelligent person, but he is stupid. showing off way too much, instead of remaining low key
I love the flow of the book, and the fact that the narration is well detailed. Good job,author.
wonderful read
love love this story. hurry up can't wait
wow interesting