TRASH NOVEL HAIXT............. THE TITLE IS GOOD. CLICKBAIT THIS IS BAD NOVEL. SHAMELESS MC, MORON MC, UGLY MC, ....................................................................... USELESS SYSTEM.. FAP 1 MONTH?? JUST FOR IDIOTIC QUEST... WITH NOOB REWARDS.... CANT HE JUST TRAIN AND train????? OR CHANGE THIS LOSER FACE!! I DONT REALLY LIKE READING. SHAMELESS MC STUPID MC AND UGLY MC TOO..... AND THIS SYSTEM ISNT EVEN HELPING THIS PIG
The story developments is very interesting and keeps the reader intrigued and interested. In addition, the stability of updates is excellent. The writing quality is also good but the author needs to make it longer so the reader doesn't get too impatient.
Its a interesting start the characters look interesting and the writing style is also good looking for more chapters keep updating and keep writing
Monillas: a human garbage.How should I put this into words? My roots come from various parts of Asia. Even though I had the privilege of being born in a first world country far away from the poverty and was allowed to flourish, go to school, have an easy life etc. I still know, hear and see the struggles of the people, family who were left behind. Poverty, desperation - they are all very real and well described within this novel.Granted, the grammar is lacking and would need an editor to work through it, but the idea and the story is still very well established and shown - and profoundly realistic. This is a story of poverty, desperation, and the things people are ready to do when they have no other options left. So far the story follows male characters. I can only imagine and fear what the story would be like if it was told from a female's perspective. All in all, I like how well the author writes about the reality of poverty in these countries. With editing and a better grasp on the English language, I'm sure the author can deliver wholesome and heart-wrenchingly realistic stories. Keep writing, author!
The author's description of the scenes were splendid!It was a good read, I am instantly hooked in cahapter one!As a fellow country men, I really know what the author tells. Hope you will check my book called Lumia: Other World and leave a review!
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Great start, really enjoyed reading. The world background is creative and imaginative. ? The flow of the story is great, keep up the great work author!?
Love this short but awesome scp fanfic! you dont find many of these that are actually good. pls continue. love the story and I dont want to see it disappear
Just read the novel without reading the comments, form your own opinion on the novel. Its a good novel with good story, good characters and good plot. If you read it, you will like it.
This is a review after reading 52 chapters of the story. The story is, like the title suggests, a cultivation story with a system. Now, what I like about the story.Pros :1. The first person narrative that author uses. It’s extremely unique in cultivation novels which are usually done in third person. Refreshing for those that want to try a cultivation novel written in a different way than others.2. Writing quality is excellent, I mean, there are no glaring flaws. That’s already an up as that’s all you really need. Author is pretty experienced, so this is to be expected.3. Update stability is great, so that’s another major plus for the story. 4. Although MC has his flaws, what Mc has no flaw? The flaws are there to make us readers symphatize with the Mc and watch him grow. The longer we read, the more we see him fix his flaw and slowly mature into the ’ideal MC’ Cons :1. MC relies too much on his system. Yes, it’s a system story, and I also get that one should exploit a cheat once they have it, but Mc needs to also learn to be more independent and instead of asking system all types of questions that he probably knows the answer to, ask more thorough ones that we readers don’t already know. Of course not all of the information is useless as there is a lot useful one, but it can be a bit tedious.Perhaps skip all those unecessary words by writing something like, ‘MC for the next hour or so asked MC all sorts of questions. Dumb as some of them were, he wanted to get everything straight, not missing anything out. After all, just a single detail could cost his life.’ Makes the MC look smarter and skips a lot of unecessary information that can be spread throughout the chapters.2. This is more of a personal preference, but in first person narrative, I feel like the paragraphs are a bit too chunky. Can be cut shorter to be more pleasing to the eyes. (Just my personal preference.)3. MC can be a bit indecisive at times, but that’s normal, jn fact, this is not even a con, I’m just putting it here in case Author forgets that character development exists. I get that MC is in an unfamiliar world, but CD is very important, don’t forget this.Well, that’s all from me. Although it looks like there are more cons than pros, most of the cons are just my suggestions to author on how he could develop the story for future continuity.Those flaws can easily be fixed and contribute to future of the story.Good story, would recommend.