I was promised a story about a villain. Almost 90 chapters in and the hero has done nothing even remotely evil or villainous except kill a mouse. Waste of time to read.
really not sure why this is not getting more attention. it's well written and interesting. I guess author just got bad algorithm rng or something because a book of this quality with 60 chapters would usually at least have 10 reviews by now. just want to say that book is very good so far
Note: I only read 4 chapters.It felt like I was watching a case study in my crim course. The protagonist was chilling to read about, not because descriptions were detailed but due to his reckless decisions and lack of stress in the moment of crime.Despite being written in first person there are actually a lot of points that go unexplained. Decisions are told to the reader then acted upon, not really elaborated on further. It’s a missed chance to get to know the protagonist’s thought process more.Contrary to my previous comment, I think the author has fallen into a trap that you can easily fall into when you write in first person—telling rather than showing. The beginning of the prologue is a good example, there are clearly a lot of emotions but it’s mostly being expressed though monologue. It ends up looking like a rant someone tweeted rather than words in a novel. Describing using literary devices like similies and metaphors can go a long way.Grammar wasn’t terrible, just missed some capitalization of words after the end of a dialogue and a few contradicting use of tenses. At one point there was a section that written in past, present, then past again even though it was referring to the same period in time. I wish you the best on the rest of the novel, Author!
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TLDR: Good book. Read it. So far, this book is really good. The writing quality is pretty good, there are no major problems that I've noticed with it. The story development is also going well, there seems to be some sort of plot. The MCs motivation is the classic be free and unfettered or whatever. Pretty standard, but I like it. The character design is also nice, there seems to be good character development on the MC, would be nice to see some more character development on the other characters too, though. Something like Ji Song, who has suffered too much from the schemes of the MC, has a sort of change of heart and becomes more scheming and makes the MC suffer a blow or something. (this is just something I. thought of, but any sort of development on the part of allies and enemies is interesting. What wrote is just an example). Author also updates a lot, which is nice. Finally, the world background is good as well. Seems like author has thought it out quite a bit. Overall, I'd recommend reading it.Also, one last thing, I think it would be interesting to see some sort of plot where MC's sect suffers an attack of some sort, a close relative dies, and mc wants to get revenge. Some sort of additional character motivation for MC. Doesn't have to be what I wrote here.
Note to author:I haven't read this yet but there are a ton of negative reviews. Aye bro. Don't give up writing. It's like when we were little and used to try to tell grown ups our stories and things. At first we couldn't convey our messages clearly because we were too young. With more time and experience we learned how to express ourselves better. But even when we got a little older and learned how to say things more coherently our stories sometimes turned out to not be as grand as we thought them to be. Maybe this is like that.Don't give up.
I will give it three stars as it was interesting, but as it was in the beginning, I still don't know if I have to review with 5 stars or with 1 star lower.By the way, this is my criteria for judging:1 star: Boring, way too clichè.2 star: Way too generoc but has a good way to make the story flow.3 star: Interesting4 star: Very interesting with unique features, can bee recomendeed for people who wanted to give reading a try.5 stars: Interesting, may be generic but has a great story flow, character development, basically a book that can be recommended as a must read.
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Well it was good at first. City transmigrate to new world in middle of forest filed with goblins/gnomes. All humans get taming books to tame monsters, everyone starts from weak monsters. The story was fresh and funny to this point then MC gets golden spoon and it all go ... MC can fuze killed monsters to upgrade his own for example he starts with goblin so after killing 2goblins and fusing their spirit with his own he gets Hoggoblin that is many times stronger than his original goblin. Its just too op when you look at it in long ran so im dropping it.
I love this kind of synopsis. You can be sure you will understand NOTHING about the novel. Does someone can give us some real informations?