wow.. k*nky but it is fantasy i guess
Been a while, though I thought There was a Chapter they where going to heal his are and hair. One day I will search for it and finish.
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Everyone who is insulting and hating the novel, I have to say, shut up, it is hard to write novels and I pretty much like how the chapters are going, Im at 1558 by the way. I like how it isn't too suspenseful so I can wait for the next leisurely. It is good to pass the time.
Wtf ending was that? It ended so abruptly in the middle of the last chapter with no resolution whatsoever. This feels more like an “end of part 1 of arc 3” then an actual ending.
Indeed! It’s rather bizarre!And everybody and their dogs bully those supposedly weaker than them, leading to one conflict after the other with side characters you will forget soon. The same as ever. I thought this novel would maybe be a bit funny, listed as comedy, but it’s just the same as a whole galaxy of mediocre, cliche novels on this and other portals.
The story itself is quite solid across the board. Decent prose and writing ability from the author, and generally just a solid read all around.
loving it so far, I can't wait for more.
A very interesting story.Loving it so far.looking forward to more chapters.I hope the author won't drop this story.
Another generic system novel. Moronic MC that hides his abilities and plot only moves to faceslap bullies. Writing quality is merely ok. With chapters locking in the 30s, it’s better to just move on.
Writing Quality ?The first ten chapters were great. If it would have kept the same non-serious Slice of Life story going out would have been a great story. The syntax and spelling is some of the best in this platform. So much so that at first I was confused by the mixed reviews and wondering why it wasn't on a more mainstream platform like Royal Roads rising stars or trending.As it turns out the reason is that start is just a catfish for a dark fantasy romance story that lurks right around the corner. A style that's much more dower and depressing. A real chore to read. It never recovers its tone and style at the start. Slowly it eats away at what you liked about it in the start until you look up, metaphorically speaking, and wonder how you got here from there. Truly a shame. But the depictions of torture and mind control of the love interest. For over thirty chapters as it amateurishly throws female leads at you left and right in total chaos best represents this series and why it isn't going to be going mainstream anytime soon. What on Earth were you thinking? You had such a good plot going. This is what creative writing does when you don't sit in the driver's seat doing outlines for the chapters and the arcs themselves. Storyboarding a chapter before and after you write it to make sure that it's not just enjoyable to read, but you got the tone across you wanted. And doing drafts so the overall product doesn't suck. A comedy of poor writer decisions. Sigh...Story Development ?I don't think I need to say more there, do I?Character Design ? ? ?They were well put together at first.Update Stability ? ? ? ? ?There's over 400 chapters somehow. Probably because you skipped doing quality assurance writing? World Background ? ? ?That lack of planning really shows here. The world-building can be said to be banal and likely written chapter to chapter. When normally you're supposed to write this first. I'll still rate it middling, because most amateur writers have no idea what a Literature Bible is anyway. Even if you pointed them at the Fallout Bible for instance? Some of them might even argue it overkill. ?
I love this. Although, where I am reading right the storyline hasn't progressed much, it has a lot of potentials and the worldbuilding seems interesting.