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Read my thoughts..... Mc is 14 at the beginning of the story.... and yet for some unknown reason he is cautious and smart.. somewhat like he is not from a city of miner... He also started hiding his powers and abilities for some unknown reason (Well he did say that he didn't want to become the target of others envy... but the thing is... how does a 14 year old kid know all this, like did he read some kind of novel or stories, or is he from earth? well Author didn't say anything about it... it's like he is smart and has knowledge for some unknown reason)
I don't like writing negative reviews, but I sincerely hope you take this criticism well and not personally for future improvement.The main character is a "Mary Sue." Plain as day. Everything goes her way to the point where it's hard to enjoy any development in the story. Spoiler: she can turn food into energy despite being a cyborg and originally having to be recharged. The only obstacle is that she needs to blend into human society, which isn't that much of a challenge because of the amount of tools she has at her disposal.The plot is missing motivation and drive. What is her purpose? Well, it's to save humanity from the evil robots, but why? The only motive she has is because she was formerly a human, but the novel doesn't depict any emotion or drive out of it.Yes, I expected an overpowered MC, but it isn't done in a way that's enjoyable to read. For comparison, the difference between the anime, "The Eminence in Shadow," and this novel is that the MC has a clear description of his goal and how to reach it with obstacles that keep the viewer invested in the development. How? He literally creates his own problems, albeit in a weird way, in order to not only entertain himself but also to further reach his goal, which is to become The Eminence in Shadow (Watch the anime, it'll make sense to you).The grammar is mostly good with some typos.The description of items, environments, and battles are good, but the characters could use some more detail.I will still keep reading to notice any changes, and I would highly suggest an introduction with a proper prologue as well as a rewrite to the first number of chapters.Again, please don't take the criticism personally, I only wish for your improvement.
I found out that it is really a nice read. as a sci-fi and cyberpunk genre that I can see through here which are my favorite. I love how the author made the character as humane as possible, but for story development aspect. the pace starting from ch 4 is pretty unstable. try to made it consistent and it will be a nice read!
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THAT Note in the synopsis reminds me of the popular saying "No man is an island
I love the plot and the flow of the story, it's not to slow moving or fast moving. This story is amazing and detailed. Arnin is my favorite due to his cruelty and such. I love how the author didn't make things to easy for Arnin as the protagonist and placed mysterious here and there like the memories of his sister and her tattoo/birthmark. The world backround is easy to understand I guess. The character design is great and detailed.
Just finished the reading and I'm totally addicted.? amazing plot and the author has done a great effort on it. That FL rock the storyline. Love your work and waiting for the next chapter ??
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I find it interesting that the man was kidnapped by a business women and not the other way around... which is cliché and the usual thing that happens in stories!!! Great way to catch the attention of readers. I love it
Ahhhh!!! Come on!!! give us some more chapters to read each time,its getting intensified each time I read this story..!!Happy and sad at the same time..!!Vesta all the best..!!
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