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This story has a lot of potential, the MC is very cool headed and the game mentioned gives players many different classes to choose from and has immersive battle tactics involved. I only wish updates were regular.
I have been around the block for a while but i honestly dnt think this deserve it's current rating. .. .. The writing looks like the author is new to it, its not bad its just okay. .. but an okay for rank 7 isnt good enough might work for a new author ranking. currently on chap 47 and i dnt think i can go beyond that. ..not my cup of tea. Like i said those new to web novel might enjoy this but for us avid readers this is trash no offense. I might be interested in reading your third book though
I'll be frank... This story surpasses 90 percent of the stories I've read. It's so engaging... Like, I can literally follow the characters on their journey. I also ship the siblings... Sorry, that's a ME thing. Lol. Great work author!
Great story.
Like others have said, massive improvements over the course of the story. The way characters act is very realistic. Other authors on this site will have characters act in ways that don't make any sense and it completely ruins the immersion. I haven't experienced that in this book. There are certainly times that I question a character's actions, but after reading further or thinking about it more, I find that those actions I questioned are actually plausible or there was a reason that wasn't yet revealed.
The author mentions in the footnotes a few times that people have complained about filler, but I have never once felt there was filler. I hope the author doesn't listen to those people anymore. So far, the story is only getting better and I trust the author.
My only criticism is the occasional english mistake.
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PS: The solar meet thing was some of the most fun reading I've had. Very creative and very cool. The outcome of the "extra prize" was very wholesome. Loved it.
PPS: If the protagonist doesn't end up with both of them, I will be very sad. Happy endings are the best endings.
One of those few stories that are really fun to read. Often times I just hate the protagonists in the stories. They are face-slapping overbearing and just as arrogant as the young masters. Often times their behavior when taken from the perspective of a third party is no different from the young master villains. In this particular story we have the young master villain who is able to get ahead of the 'protagonist' world main character, and is able to rouse the 'MC' into acting like the novel villain. The young master villain MC of this story steels the heroines, like other villain novels, yet he uses a more benign approach. He uses his advantages appropriately and avoids the pitfalls that the usual novel villains fall in with the world protagonist, which is usually the use of force or family connections to suppress the hero. I especially like the event where he goes and finds the hero's special encounter to get a lost medical technique and then memorizes it and takes a few key pages while leaving an incomplete version for the hero to find. The hero still finds the technique but does not realize that it is missing a few key pieces of information that would allow him to practice it safely. This ends up causing the hero long term problems and even impacts others of the world heros.
A nice and detailed book... it's a great masterpiece and I like it.
Your story holds potential. I can see that you have a very clear image in your head of how your story looks and plays out, but due to a lack of rhythm in your writing, a protagonist that could be better developed, and repeated grammar and sentence structure mistakes, it fails to come across. Overall, I believe you can get there. You just have to keep practicing. You might want to consider hiring an editor, a least until your English improves. I wish you the best of luck!
if you want to write a story you must use punctuation. Otherwise it's essentially unreadable.in your head, as you write it, it probably makes sense. but to the reader, it's chaos.
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This novel has an engaging plot and the execution has fluidity that propels to the next scene quite easily. In other words, it's easy to get hooked and go on reading. Keep on writing, author. All the best.