Great First chapter. Little to no grammatical errors. A novel about vampires is always am interesting one. I like how you have described things in detail as well. Looking forward for more chapters :)
As he headed out the door, he couldn't help to think about Sakumo.
"No." I immediately deny.
"Yeah, can you make me something with high energy and I'm going to start getting up for breakfast around this time starting today, so if possible please make high energy food starting today for me."
They were waiting for her by the university entrance, gave her an envelope and left without any commotion. It contains her both parents pictures. Maybe they really got them in their building, she don't know. It's just irritates her so much. Are they really desperate to revive that old lady to go to such length as tracking down her parents and threatens her.
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Amazing book is a 100% must read. Definitely my favourite ever TDG fanfic its definitely one of the best fanfics I've ever read.But I think you should let Nei Lie get power as to not be divined so easily by the sage emporer. Also can you use the library of heavens path to modify enslavement technique to let you also enslave demon beasts. It would be sick If he just flew around on a Pheonix or something. Also have him take control of other continents and make it something like their are other people living on them it's just no one knows of them.
She just smiled at her thoughts....
Didn't make sense not to live for fun
You'll never shine if you don't glow
Didn't make sense not to live for fun
It's a cool place and they say it gets colder