The book is actually decent but the issue lies in the fact that there are no characters the mc is the only character there’s only so far a story can go with one person. everyone else is extremely shallow even his own brother isn’t exempt the lack of a female lead is also annoying and don’t say lunar is a female lead she’s a ducking AI there are other ppl who were introduced but never focused on like serah, Emma and Chloe assuming they were focused on more and possibly love interests along with his brother being focused the series would be ten times better but seeing how there’s no hint of this happening and the mc is focused on work instead spending time with his family or socializing he’s wasting his youth im gonna drop it but if it happens just tell me I’ll go read it. This review is till ch125
Awesome. I can't wait to see want happened next to the two. Great storyline author. Waiting for more updates from you author. Keep going ??
I have always love gender bender novels and fics. A very interesting take when it comes to system and VR. I would love to read more. >................
Writing: no paragraphs, no spacing between dialog, just a big bunch of text.Stability: this man has no life outsideStory: help everybody! Me? Oh I don't count. (mc)Character: I kept reading, hoping that the MC will get better... NOPE! Just a moron with a system, that remains a moron (telling everybody that he's reincarnated; tells everybody about his cheats; No protections against seers, prophets; Gamer's Mind is nonexistent even though he has it; three systems combined and he does not use them properly; and some more that I can't remember right now)World: It's a fanfic. The world is already there.
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Hahahaha. This feels strange reading your own story. The author is ugly and annoying.Main Character is very handsome.Harem Please!!!Upvote for Harem!I want a very big Harem!Low star until Master Rabbink gives easier missions. This Rabbink is too ********.
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Ok. I've read till the last chapters, here we go. First of all, WARNING TO NEW READERS:You'll have a lot of things to ignore on the first chapters. The emotes rarify themselves a lot on the latest chapters so that's one good thing, and he stops pressing enter at the end of every sentence too. So HAVE HOPE!That's the only critical flaws I found writing-wise. Story development-wise, I won't say it's the best I've ever seen, and I mean the man calls himself the trolling master so I mean yea... The POV are sometimes all over the place, and there's little things you could nitpick, but overall, I'll say it and I have pretty high standards, the story was enjoyable.Came here after reading Yggdrasil's pupil, so I knew it was gonna get better. I was right! It does get better. The carefree style of the author stays, but at least you understand what's happening, and how hilarious it is ;)The world-building makes out a pretty dark world, outlining the naïve character of the MC.Naïve, but not stupid, though! Sometimes, I was shocked by how creative the MC's plan were. He just bad at talking to people, leading to lots of misunderstandings.In short, read it ;)
For a first time writing, you tried. Your story development is okay and other things come in place. But you might want to pay keen attention to your dialogues. Its not easy writing, so I must commend you. Good story. Some errors here and there but with some editing and more reading you would improve. Oh and your title, you may want to put a space between the first question mark and the rest.
This is a very captivating read! The writing style is great and hooks you from the beginning. I love the vivid description and imagery. Great work!
I actually really like this one and Is probably my favorite of any of the other stories I've read from you. I do hope you eventually continue it.I love the MC and the original succubus. Unlike in " A Fox's system" Or your rewrite of "A Fox's Systems" I feel the banter between the MC and the Succubus to be a lot more natural and funny.The story seems to progress at a rate I am really satisfied with and I like that there does seem to be actual story arcs with some consequences such as the end of Ch. 10. I do like that the story doesn't seem to be afraid of violence and death. It's also kind of fun and amusing watching the innocent MC turn into a ***-fiend against her will.I am also glad that we got the one and all holy YURI! Oh, how I've dreamed of it. I am kind of hoping that the two girls become companions and that follows the MC as she travels. I even like the idea that eventually the MC has them heal and bring her body back to her parents or that something happens such as the Succubus possessing her former body.This is also a type of story I've been wanting to read for years. Overall I am a fan of this and do hope we get more.