Great characterisation and interesting story
Currently it is up to chapter 35, and i really like it. That's it, ACDPQS out!.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Really good start but there isn’t enough chapters. This been up for a month and only 11 chapters. Author please start posting daily
Hey Guys! I am the author of this novel and yes I did give myself a shameless 5 star... This is my first time riding a novel that is supposed to be over 800 chapters. It is an original and is all made up by your's truly. Please be sure to give me advice on how to improve the book also if you would like to get chapters before others join my discord and I will share them with some of you to help me prove read them! https://discord.gg/evmvZXMThank you for reading!
I think that I have only come across problems which can be fixed fairly easily, like the paragraphs, as I read a lot of novels it's not a problem but new readers may find it quite hard to read and will most likely lose their words so separate the book and there are a few grammatical errors but even I have that problem so it's fine.
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this is very good. I hope the story continues : . .
??????I loves this novel a lot. I have reas this entire thing through and really enjoyed it, as it was of my first novels i have read. Thanks author for a wonderful novel??????28d
Well, this is a review after I read 84 chapter.What to say about this book? It is promising, the premise is intriguing and also very interesting, sure it's a story about dungeon Master but here we discover a new system more sophisticated. The fact that MC came back from time is also a big plus because he won't stay weak for too long and he's not acting like a noob who doesn't know what to do.Tbh, my feeling are complicated about MC. He is intelligent, cunning and also has the trait of a demon being merciless and treating everyone as tool (not minding their feeling) It's good but also annoying to read. /! Spoiler Alert /!For exemple, when he rode on a worm to find where it rest to steal it's egg, I was rly annoyed by what he did like, this worm saved him from death in his past life but what he did in return now? He mercilessly stole her egg even though he should know the feeling of being betrayed. To me, he's really hypocrite, "Don't do to others what you don't want them to do to you".Well, maybe I'm the only one bothered but I wanted to complain "-"Anyways, MC is pretty skillful but sometimes I feel that he's also making dumb decisions even though he should be aware of some fact since he survived til the end of the game ( I forgot which mistake but I know that it was dumb for someone who experienced the game once).Side character, they have near to zero screen time or importance, they're only here to fulfill their role and that's all. They're bland, no emotion, it's boring seriously if there's only the MC.For exemple we have his first slave, Guo Chen, he should be (in MC first life) one of the six greatest hunter, but here I saw just a emotionless character calling brother here and there, just following his order.We lack seriously some side character dialogue or inner monologue to understand what they feel right now.There's also a sever lack of information about the game, it's purpose/goal, about demon family and so on. I hope someday author explain it to us or will it be unexplained ? idkTo finish, this novel has his strength but also weaknesses. Still it is definitely a hidden gems that is uncovered, let it have it's chance and you may not regret it who know :)
Another Shameless review, but this time I come with important news.1) I opened a server. Discord Server: https://discord.gg/TtnGfdKanr2) The novel is being edited and will be improved when I get time to go back to it
I can handle normal poor english but this is almost at the level of an MTL. The author clearly is uninterested in establishing his characters or his world as he skips over major events (discovering the MC time travels he is over it and knows exactly what to do instantly, the CEO of a company gives a random stranger an 11million dollar gaming machine for no discernable reason, and so on). If the author learns to use an editor and slows down enough try to tell a story with even slightly realistic characters this might be great. Not willing to waste more time than I already have to see if they ever do though.