Overall a good story. More depth needed but so far interesting ..The introduction of internal energy could be a good path to explore but I really can't wait to see how the story progress going forward. Let's hope it doesn't flop going forward while it had such a great start.
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Loved it.
I like the story. Lovely cover, checkThe synopsis in itself is cool.The banter between both leads is sweet. More chapters......!!!!!!!! Keep it up!
It is always better to check the reviews of the novels before reading, I was about to read this that has ntr, saved by the community, just don't read this unless you like that? ?
Eh, so far, I’ve read half of what has been written, and the main character is still a little boy, only 8 years old. The story is okay, but not great. Kinda weird that there’s so much sexual stuff going on with a little kid. I like that he’s leveling up as a mage and what not, but, I just wish he was older faster. The story is well written otherwise for the most part, it is slowly progressing. Not sure if I want to invest in it since it’s going a little slow. Gonna look at some other stories for now.
It was an interesting read and the plot surprised me
Nice fanfiction bro. great story and great work. I beleive you will complete this fanfiction and won't drop it midway....... best of luck man ?????
Oh, yeah, I saw a lot of authors writing reviews for their own books. I don't really get the point....probably another description. I guess I wanted to write something I would like to read? yeah, that was kind of it. I hope you'll like it!
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Hello everyone, I am the author of "The Primordian," Aeys. The following is a shameless author self-review, more akin to my thoughts on the story and what to expect going forward.First, thank you for checking out my story and for reading this review, the synopsis, or even just stopping by. I’m not sure how long "The Primordian" will stay online, but for the near future, this journey will be shared here as well. I'm not sure what the future of my posting holds, but it will never be hard to find. At least for the significant future, as I aim to properly do this beautiful universe of my dreams the justice it deserves, you should expect regular updates every 1-2 days, which may reduce to 2-3 days as the first arc of the story begins to rear its head.I don’t want to go too in-depth with what to expect because I don’t want to spoil anything, but I’ll start by saying that the first three chapters were originally one 9000-word chapter. These three chapters are an emotional rollercoaster for multiple characters who are very dear to my heart. As such, they won’t be edited, shortened, or cut in any way that removes important aspects of their interactions.In short: please bear with a slightly longer (more words, yay!) and deeper first few chapters.As for the rest of the story, I intend for it to follow the tone set by the first three chapters. Expect a more light hearted and easily digested tone, while the overarching concepts and world of the [Fold] are quite a bit darker. I don’t love tragedies, since I’m kind of a big baby, but in the end, only Arkeus might know what the future holds. The [Fold] is a beautiful but dangerous place, and the future seems grim, so buckle up and tuck in your legs—prepare for a bumpy ride. Also, consider wearing a helmet, you're going to need one if you don't want to be caught in the System's cross-fire.Kingdom building will be introduced quickly, with loyalty and the relationships between various Arkien species and allied races as a major theme across different arcs. There will always be humor where Atlas is involved—it’s the only way he knows how to deal with things, at least for now.There are quirky and funny characters on the way, darker and more sinister ones as well, but at the end of the day, this is supposed to be an adventure, so I won’t spoil where our map leads us.Romance is something I’m deeply considering. Maybe because of my upbringing, it’s a very important and meaningful concept to me. I don’t believe many web novels on this platform depict romance in a respectful way. A ton of s*x scenes does not equate to romance. That is not romance. It’s something you read near paper towels and don’t talk about. Romance is about genuine emotional connection, trust, and growth. It’s much deeper as a concept and harder to convey, but as I said, I’m heavily considering it. There are already a few characters whose romantic endeavors I support, so we’ll have to see.As for tropes and clichés? I don’t really care whether I use them or not, but Atlas definitely does. If I write one egregious enough, I won't escape it without being called a "dumb*ss of properly cosmic proportions." I’d stop him if I could, but unfortunately, his sass is part of the deal. This story is written with a far more overarching mystery behind it. One that definitely can not be solved by the minds of only those in this novel alone. Thus, I'm not even going to try. I have a universe in my mind, these are only some of my favorite characters that take place in it.Thank you for reading, and thank you for stopping by. Stay healthy, and feel free to ask any questions you might have. I’ll answer any that I can.And before you ask: No. There will never be a harem in my stories, at least not for any protagonist. Unless I get struck by lightning and cursed by the Dorito-Trio, don’t expect a harem. Ever.Thanks, and have a great day!— Aeys, or to some of my family, Grid.
let me tell you one thing about this book, it is foooookin Immaculate, the flow, the style, the character individuality, hotdamnnn, what did i losing out all this time?