First of all, I like the title! It kinda reminds me of the book "I am number four". It also has a unique story line that the author described in the beginning of the chapter. That goes to show how dedicated he is (the author) to let, readers, know the world! Great job(plus *coughs* the scratching of his balls WKKWKW) Overall I like how you explained the story and what they see. The only thing that I want to point out are the confusing words and sentences in the story. It didnt distrupted my journey, but it would be really nice if you could improve those few lines better!
Well first the reason I’m dropping is because this is a harem novel. At this point I’m not surprised authors like to ruin their stories. Cliche and boring, barely any background, uses all those “seeking death” type words that give me a headache. Story is probably nothing like the description since this is supposedly a harem novel. All in all harem novels have no idea the struggle involved and authors just decide to throw away logic and add nothing that makes sense to bring in all the edgy teens and degenerate’s who only read for the lemon scenes.
Epic in all categories, I like it a lot. I'd recommend it to you. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I love this the character sounds cool I honestly hope these get picked pls author make this quick I can't wait to read it ??????????
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one of my fav novels.Absolutely amazing experience
Bad just horrifically bad. I almost never leave reviews but this story is bad to the point that I feel the need to leave one.The system is overly complicated to the point of not needing a cheat sheet. The mechanics behind everything is even worse.The MC is so dumb I feel like I am less intelligent for having any insight into his thoughts.The cliches are ridiculous without being funny.This is a few hours of my life I will never get back and I am mad about it
The worldbuilding caught my eye, really, it is very dark and fantastic, it is not too whimsical for a novel with such deep themes, and the writing style of the author is greatly enjoyable. It is very luscious without being overly descriptive, I do not have much to complain about here.
An absolutely great novel, there are basically no spelling/grammar/wording errors, I can remember maybe 5 in nearly 200 chapters. The characters themselves are all rather complex and there are barely any true 'mob' characters, though the amount of characters that are actually important is somewhat high, they are still a manageable amount and are all given character, not always completely unique, but that is natural as humans have character traits in common as well. There is no typical 'forced plot' like someone the MC is avoiding being in the same city by chance, if something like that happens then it is for a valid reason and not a random event, most of the time, the author has to introduce new characters somehow after all. The worldbuilding itself is quite good as well, it is going quite slowly, partly probably because the novel is progressing relatively slowly, but it is happening and done quite well. And while the story is progressing slowly one isn't getting bored of it(or at least I didn't get bored anyway). I would definitely recommend you to at least give it a try if you like the general premise of such stories, of course.
Like fresh snow this story makes me just want to cuddle under my blanket and read. Amazingly written and takes me on an adventure that I can only say .. wow what an imzgination.Well done Author. Please dont stop writing. You have inspired my mind with your story
When you get paid to make spelling errors
Don't just don't do this to yourself. It is bad. Starts out ok but the author demands money not even 50 chapters in. Forgets what he writes, horrible power scaling (quite ironic) overall disappointing.