Alright this is actually a decent fanfic. No system, no ludicrous wish fulfilment nonsense.There are a few flaws though. The first is that you obviously do not proofread. The second is that your attention to standard writing rules is half assed : You do not start your sentences with capitals, you write numbers with symbols instead of letters. Lastly, sometimes it gets a little too much with other’s reaction of the main character deeds. Many times I have found myself half sighing/cringing when I read Hiruzen thinking "how is he this good oh my god ??". No. He is Hiruzen Sarutobi, he has seen Jounin level seven year-old before and all kind of prodigees through his decades of kagedom. Get that fixed, and your story will level up in quality greatly. I wish you the best !
