I am sorry I didn't leave a full star review.But it's only the beginning so this was as high as I could go. I came from your tiktok video. I honestly really liked the idea of The Fallen Empire so I wanted to ask if you would continue that.Also if you could,please give my works a chance. It would be nice to know another writer is reading and you can maybe tell me where I went wrong and stuff.Your biggest hurdle is probably dialogue. Something I also struggle with. Atleast I saw that was the case with the four chapters I have read up until now.It would be better if each and every dialogue was unique to that person,don't always use the same tone,use descriptions to enhance the experience and feeling you can get from dialogue. Don't be afraid to use cliches as long as you don't fully rely on them. Pick a strong characteristic of your novel and run with it until the end.That's all.I am sorry I couldn't give any power stones since I ran out. I will give some tomorrow.
