What Happens in Vegas...: The Heiress and CEO's Shotgun Wedding

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Honestly, it's kinda ass. Just a run of the mill, MC fucks everything and everyone noteworthy and they all love him unconditionally. The plot is all laid out in front of you and is completely linear, everything happens right after the previous event, there is no returning to clean up or previous mentions of anything that happened before its just "this happens, and then that happens, and we're done". The characters don't develop in anyway, shape or form. The only "development" is that they get stronger and that's about it.Honestly not worth the read.

Very few originals are found in webnovel which are based on the Indian culture, And i think this novel is one of the best among them even if the novel isn't progressed much, the starting and world background coupled with characters making the novel very promising. Author please continue this novel okay? since very few Indian culture based novels are this much promising.

this novel would be good if the main character didn't hide his cultivation.......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

I was expecting a realistic story after reading the 1st chapter but by 7th chapter i realized that this will be just another pipedream novel about world peace and a hero raised out of tragedy (quite appealing to ignorant masses). The deceased grand mother character made sure that the MC will be person who is happy to have people walk all over him with an assuring attitude that he wont take any revenge even when he becomes powerful in the future. I guess these kind of MC's appeal to the hidden masochistic side of whimps.

For a first time writing, you tried. Your story development is okay and other things come in place. But you might want to pay keen attention to your dialogues. Its not easy writing, so I must commend you. Good story. Some errors here and there but with some editing and more reading you would improve. Oh and your title, you may want to put a space between the first question mark and the rest.