Victorian Abyss - Reviews

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- Por supuesto, pero la próxima no habrá quien lo oculte.

I really don't want to hear this.

Marrybell and Nunnally, the real ones, are likely imprisoned to serve as reproductive mares for Ciel while he parades with better versions of them. That is the only viable explanation I could see and when I proposed it to Danzou-sama he agreed with me that it was quite likely as he himself had done some shady business and showed how it was not impossible to find people that can pretend to be the true deal.

Chapter 1  is a fantastic start.  You've established a unique premise with Hengsheng's unexpected system power, setting the stage for an exciting, unconventional cultivation journey.  The initial scene in the Endless Void, showcasing the struggle between transcendent beings, is captivating and  immediately immerses the reader in this world's grand scale. Hengsheng's initial despair after being declared spirit coreless is very relatable, and you've effectively conveyed the emotional impact of his situation.  His determination and resilience shine through, especially in his interaction with his mother.  The pacing of the chapter is excellent, gradually building the suspense leading up to the reveal of Hengsheng's system power.  The "Ding! [Make a wish]" moment is both intriguing and promising, leaving the reader eager to discover the possibilities of this system.