Trapped In A Mansion Full Of Degenerates

amazing start !!

The kingdom of God has come near. Repent and believe the good news!John3.16For God so lovedthe world that he gavehis one and only Son,that whoever believesin him shall not perish but have eternal life.17For God did not send his Son into the worldto condemn the world, but to save the world through him.18Whoever believes in him is not condemned,but whoever does not believe stands condemned already because they have not believed in the name of God’s one and only Son.19This is the verdict: Lighthas come into the world, but people loved darkness instead of light because their deeds were evil.20Everyone who does evil hates the light, and will not come into the light for fear that their deeds will be exposed.21But whoever lives by the truth comes into the light, so that it may be seen plainly that what they have done has been done in the sight of God.For more information: youtube.com/@PastorPatrickWinfrey

Overall the story is a very fun read though it goes a bit slow for the amount of chapters it is plenty enough of entertainment to make up for it.

Out of the 51 chapters posted, I have read 10 chapters. The story is interesting. The stability of updates is good, Story is developing nicely. The character design is OK. A world background is good but it is not specified which era it is or what place it is.There are some issues with typos and spellings. The capital for 'I' is used less and the small i is appearing. At some places the sentences start abruptly and the inverted commas of the speech portion get left behind. These mistakes do not however interfere with the reading of the book.I would suggest you run your draft through an online grammar checker. It will get rid of many of the errors. I also do that otherwise little mistakes tend to creep in.All the best.

"So you decided to come after all." She questions him, "Or are you doing something and happened to pass by?" Her tone was not filled with the respect she had given him when she believed him to be her guardian, nevertheless, it was still as respectful as she would treat anyone else.

If I have to meet more men like that bratty casino heir just to find the right husband then I think I just have to quit and become an old-maid.